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hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

0 posted 2007-09-10 10:27 PM

I Am Not Steel

I am stilled
not steel
though cold
and silent

I am soil and sand
eroded
in the wake
of your leaving

I am bones and tendons
tended now by carrion
for I am death
in the flesh

and damn this heart
that knows no better
than to go on
beating

I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S

Bronzeage
Member

since 2007-07-20

Posts 197

1 posted 2007-09-14 12:26 PM

A well done, but sad piece.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2007-09-14 12:47 PM

No, you are not "STEEL" ~ You are a "MAGNOLIA" ~ and should be treated with great care.

The flower may be falling off the tree at this moment in time, but a new bud will blossom and grow, dear poetess.

Loving hug,
Linda

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 2007-09-14 08:17 AM

You are the seed pods of the whipporwill, pulled out and strewn about by a cruel wind and yet you magically come together to bloom again time after time....

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2007-09-14 08:27 AM

What a wonderful and powerful write, Ruth ... excellent phrasing and play on words throughout.

VERY much enjoyed this! Well done!

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

5 posted 2007-09-14 11:11 AM

Wonderful writing.

A

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2007-09-14 11:35 AM

HootieGal~

WONDERFULLY WRITTEN~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2007-09-14 12:16 PM

good one

Bobby Jordan
Member

since 2007-08-13

Posts 491
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

8 posted 2007-09-14 08:34 PM

Yo hoot_owl_rn,

Snap out of it.

Nice write, but I hope you feel better soon.

Bobby

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

9 posted 2007-09-16 02:46 PM

terse the verse
but as always well written and expressed.

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

10 posted 2007-09-16 09:45 PM

Oh, Hoot!
What an ending!
What a great peice of writing!
Proud of you
Liz

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