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Dirty Floor
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Dirty Floor |
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Debo Member
since 2006-04-18
Posts 321Texas U.S.A. |
An unforeseen heartache That cracks her very soul She feels her shattered heart Oozing from her pores. What happened to the Happy girl that once Made her life whole. Now she is empty a shell Of what once was so pure. The monster slowly bleeds her Heart of love and hope With each wicked word spoken. Is he smiling at what she has become His blackened soul satisfied at Knowing he has won. The monster looks down at her With evil in his coal black eyes And he feels nothing As she squeezed the trigger One last time. Look at your reflection in Her crimson colored life Now in puddles on This dirty floor. Debo |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Well, this is rather disturbing, but I think that you intended the intensity and have been successful at it. I'd be interested in seeing other free verse that you have written, on a different topic. I have the feeling that anger interfered a bit in this piece just a little. I do hope this isn't something you are truly feeling...or thinking of doing. Nothing is worth that. I would absolutely like to see more of your work. I will look for it  Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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Debo Member
since 2006-04-18
Posts 321Texas U.S.A. |
Thank you Caroline for reading and the honest reply. Yes this is my first time at the darker side I'm glad you enjoyed it. Debo |
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