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ivordavies
Senior Member

since 2007-01-10

Posts 739
Chester, England

0 posted 2007-02-01 05:06 PM

Leading Light

A sudden thought springs to my mind,
a statement borne in rhyme.
I find this happens frequently,
and cherish it each time.

Don’t ask me where the thought came from,
another soul or mine.
Or maybe it bleeds from the ‘whole’,
if so, this thought’s divine.

The thought then echoes through my mind,
I’m clothed within it’s gown.
I actually feel, the thought’s relief,
when it is written down.

Then other thoughts can quickly come,
like rain, they start to pour.
While some must wait until the first
has more time to mature.

When time is right, I sit me down,
then more words start to flow.
My pen moves through the rhyme with ease,
and writes it in one go.

I carefully study every thought,
and review every line.
to help with understanding,
of the words within the rhyme.

These written words bear ripened fruit,
like grapes plucked from the vine.
so from this point, I nourish them,
and make them really mine.

I know that I am meant to share,
this gift that I’ve received,
to help some find their inner strength,
in what has been conceived.

My poetry can mean so much,
to those who care to read.
But please don’t offer me the praise,
I did not plant the seed..

There really is, a leading light,
to see us through our day.
It shows itself in many forms,
to help us find our way.

But you, my friends, must seek it out,
then with it you can shine.
As I have found with poetry,
a gift I now make ‘mine’.

Ivor G Davies

The moment created this second, is a moment that's going to last.
It lives the full spectrum of time, the future, the present and past.

Fairplay
Member

since 2007-01-15

Posts 222
England

1 posted 2007-02-01 06:37 PM

With the leading lights I find
This thought is in my mind?
Oft like a sheep I follow blind
Especially in my motor car
When tail-lights I’ll follow far
I think I learned it from my Pa
The leading car goes his own way
Then surely it’s me that has to pay
Or else it may just spoil my day

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2007-02-01 07:01 PM

Ivor,
"But you, my friends, must seek it out,
then with it you can shine.
As I have found with poetry,
a gift I now make ‘mine’."

You summed it up well.

trutodaraiders
Senior Member

since 2006-12-02

Posts 820
CA

3 posted 2007-02-02 11:19 AM

Ivor you are gifted, and humbled. Your light does shine on this poem. I dont comment on every poem I read, but do know my eyes have scanned every poem you have posted here. Thanks for sharing
I know that I am meant to share,
this gift that I’ve received,
to help some find their inner strength,
in what has been conceived.

My poetry can mean so much,
to those who care to read.
But please don’t offer me the praise,
I did not plant the seed..

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

4 posted 2007-02-02 12:05 PM

How about changing this line
another soul or mine.
To tweak it just alittle bit
another soul of mine, so it fits

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2007-02-02 12:43 PM

There really is, a leading light,
to see us through our day.
It shows itself in many forms,
to help us find our way.

But you, my friends, must seek it out,
then with it you can shine.
As I have found with poetry,
a gift I now make ‘mine’.
there truly is a leading light...exceptional write, enjoyed

wredgranny
Member

since 2006-11-18

Posts 493
Ky. USA

6 posted 2007-02-02 12:52 PM

Sigi(thank you) for the wonderful gift of spirit you share,and as for me I would not change a word is perfect as written!
blessings

granny!

ivordavies
Senior Member

since 2007-01-10

Posts 739
Chester, England

7 posted 2007-02-21 08:39 PM

Thank you all for your responses and my apologies for taking so long to reply.

Rhia, not sure where you thought I was taking this, I am only one soul, I was referring to my muse being an independent person(soul) guiding my words, hopes this helps explain my meaning.

I really do feel that a lot of my poetry is 'assisted' in this manner, and certainly some of it I only read after it has reached the paper!

Ivor

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