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I think that I shall never see
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I think that I shall never see |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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I think that I shall never see They pass me in their hurrys It is plural, each of them has one out there on the road, and I have my hurry too. It’s catching but you could be here, I wouldn’t give it to you. I am not in it nor it in me. Cold cement damp on my pants-butt reminds me of itself, myself. The wet almost-circle of cloth challenges my Zen but only a little. What was I thinking? They pass me in their thought; singular. I’ll never get that one, never see, mine being different; my being different as cold cement. No, I shall never see why the good things go, the dreams falter nor why I’m left here in this park alone with my rain and the echoes of all the unreachable hurrys, those and the wet impatient ducks still quacking and nosing. Their butts are wet too and they don’t mind; but they are hungry for Zen and bread I don’t have. Where did the life go? The everything, you know; my hair asks the little breeze, where the love, the breeze that has already passed before I feel it, the everything. It doesn’t answer. I think that I shall never see shall never see shall never I stay until the dark swells around me and the wet is warm, succinct. No, I shall never see. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
don't know why but this is the line for me... "The wet almost-circle of cloth challenges my Zen but only a little" guess I needed it tonight thank you Ed |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
alone with my rain and the echoes of all the unreachable hurrys, ~*~ I don't know, Sir, if this is quite right...  ...you see,I believe each hair once felt a breeze, and that you do know... and that the unreachable hurries are still to be. Because you are this... and because you won't quit. I know...because my brother told me so. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You are so talented Ed. Never stop writing..and I'll never stop reading you.  In the midst of winter, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I stay too |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RatMan~ 'Where did the life go? The everything, you know; my hair asks the little breeze, where the love, the breeze that has already passed before I feel it, the everything. It doesn’t answer.' Oh my ... I read you and I wander through your words of wonder ... wondering is a good thing~ Mile Square Park, yes ? You not only amaze ... you stir admiration~ Yep ... you sure do~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I can see this, and you know, my point of view is the one with the wet pants and the zen. This one is strong. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
I think you might be my favorite poet on here. I mean that. Cheers - Ed And I said to the devil, "You better leave my spleen alone." |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I loved the feeling of potential reality, somewhere between simple humans and the force of nature... like speaking directly to the deepest wound pounding it on the head, asking, what could I have been thinking...life's unavoidable determination of wars, peace, profound alternatives...trying to shape our reality, each and every one. Loved this immensly  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear Ed....parks and ducks and the breeze in hair...you are there, your notebook clinging to your hand and your pencil like a kite, uplifted! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Ed from the shallowest cuts you bleed poetry. a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
No, I shall never see why the good things go, the dreams falter ~*~ I know this moment. I know this feeling. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Good to see you, Lady....it's been a while. And yes, I know you know it....wish you didn't. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
No, I shall never see why the good things go, the dreams falter Some things are beyond our eyes... beyond our comprehension... and cold reality is such a poor companion. This leaves me aching... and understanding... and in awe of your talent. |
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