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Direction of Life
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Direction of Life |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England 
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Direction of Life If life progresses down a path, Where you don’t want to go. It’s no surprise, that you may feel, You’re getting nowhere slow. In what direction did you choose, To take your ‘path of life’, Or did you choose, were you just led, By those who gave advice. Maybe you, meandered free, To end up here today. But what horizons would you seek, if you could go ‘your’ way. There’s nothing wrong with roaming wild, But choice must play some part. The way you go, is up to you, Though governed by your heart. It’s better still to set some goals, To give your life an aim. Try not to reach up for the sky, Just things you can attain. To make sure I was walking straight, When I had lost my way, I made a list of things to do, To help me every day. To move a little further, from the things that tied my feet. To be a little nicer, to the folks I chanced to meet. To help some anxious people, to set their worries free To bring a little happiness, to others and to me. To heal some wounded spirits, and to help them bear their pain. To motivate the weary, to find the strength to live again. To seek a purpose in my life, for everything I do. And finally for wisdom, and the will to see it through. These may not be your choices, As our paths are not the same, But they lifted me from darkness, And let me love life again. So write down what your missing, Let the words become your seeds. For with love, and care, and effort, They’ll sprout up to meet your needs. Ivor G Davies ------------------------------------------------------------------ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
awww, this was amazingly beautiful.... loved the wisdom and insight you portrayed... wonderful music you make |
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Beatrice Boyle Member
since 2006-12-06
Posts 438 |
Ivor...you old philospher you! This one I like!!!!  Bea |
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wredgranny Member
since 2006-11-18
Posts 493Ky. USA |
To make sure I was walking straight, When I had lost my way, I made a list of things to do, To help me every day. ~AHO~ The path chosen is one we walk not blind or led but with our hearts wide open for the lesson life waits to teach.
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I may be an offbeat thinker about poetry, but my offbeat thought on this one is that, having seen that heptameter couplets would be a solid way to present a poem of this depth and breadth, I'd have gone all the way with it! There's no real need for the shortened, Q&A pacing, when the lines and rhyme are as solid as these. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just what I needed |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
Thank you all for your appreciation of this. LeeJ Glad you enjoyed the read, it takes a lot of the readers imagination to interpret beauty and music from words directed at the soul. Bea Thanks for looking at me again after my little quip on you previous post. But what's with the old? A man is only as old as the woman he feels and Joan is younger than me! Ratleader The reason I used the style for the main body of the poetry was to slow down the reader and add a gentle flow to the absorption of my meaning. I have found that the direct use of couplets makes this type of poetry too hard. As I wished to I emphasise the 'List' as a tool to get one's head in order I extracted this to the more Hard Hitting beat of directly placed couplets. The reasoning behind this was to hopefully stir the imagination of the reader into creating their own list of things to do in life! This 'To Do' list is something I use personally in all aspects of life as a visual reminder of 'where I am at', it can of course have items deleted, modified or re-prioritized as the mood or necessity takes you. Hope this gives you some insight into the mind of the writer. Thank you for your comments in regard to this as it is always good to see another poet's view in relation to my work. wredgranny "The path chosen is one we walk not blind or led but with our hearts wide open for the lesson life waits to teach." This is the very reason I say that our 'lists' have to be open to alteration, mine is always being modified as 'life' teaches us new lessons everyday. I have been looking at your work and find it quite enlightening and from a differing perspective than the race I am running in, but as I have said in a reply to one of your posts I feel we follow the same pathway to a great extent. I do have a problem with you however, I have followed one 'granny' over here from another site and now am at a loss what to call you both! Thanks again everyone for your response, Have fun, ivor |
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