Open Poetry #40 |
Castle Of Tears |
sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Castle Of Tears Far up in the mountains high Its silhouette against the sky There stands a castle dark and tall Surrounded by a rocky wall And there inside that castle deep Are secrets that the locals keep For somewhere in the walls within Is something that should not have been It prowls the catacombs by night And fills the villagers with fright An abomination so they say That should not see the light of day The legends say that long ago The castle grounds were all aglow When a baron and his lovely bride First built it on the mountainside The parties and the gala balls Abounded in the castle walls One day amidst all of the mirth The news was heard there’d be a birth The baron soon would have a son To inherit all that he’d begun The castle soon was filled with joy At the prospects of a baby boy His lady labored hard and long But something then went very wrong And what came in the world that day Was not human the people say The baron closed the castle door The balls and parties were no more And no one really knows the fate Of the thing beyond the castle gate As years went by the baron aged Within his castle locked and caged Until at last he finally died But people would not go inside Until the bravest of them all Dared enter in the castle hall Inside they searched for many days Within the castles tunnel maze The horror that they found inside Was something that they could not hide Rotted corpses were strewn around Removed from chambers underground As they searched about so slowly They felta presence quite unholy It watched them from the shadows deep As all about them it would creep Those hearty souls then quickly fled That castle place of rotted dead In fires of hell though they may burn They vowed they never would return Over the years the stories flew And the thing within the castle grew Shunning the light and eyes of men Safe in the castle deep within At night it left the castle doors And wandered out onto the moors With darkness as its only friend Where people it would not offend One day a village maiden fair Traveled up the mountain there To forage in the nearby woods For herbs and seeds and other goods She lingered in the woods too long The cold north winds were blowing strong And as the sun began to fade She followed down the path she’d made But in the dark she lost her way And off the path she went astray She tripped over a rocky ledge And fell off of the mountains edge Her fate it seemed was very bleak As she clung onto a rocky peak What happened next folks aren’t quite sure But something strong took hold of her And plucked her from the rocky ledge To place her gently on the edge Her ankle though received a sprain She couldn’t walk without great pain The thing that saved her from her plight Lifted her and held her tight It carried her with awkward stride Down the treacherous mountainside It took the scared and injured lass And placed her by the village pass A worried crowd of village men Were sure she’d not be seen again Then seeing it with her in arm They knew that it had done her harm Before the girl could stay their hands The crowd chased it off of their lands With shouts and yells of “Evil brute” The village men all gave pursuit With rocks and stones thrown at its head Back up the mount the creature fled Bloody and hurt it reached the path To escape the village people’s wrath It fled into its castle keep Down to the tunnels dark and deep The men did not dare follow it Down there into the darkened pit The crowd decided to adjourn And went back home ne’er to return When the girl relayed the real events They said her story made no sense But villagers cannot explain Why every day in sun or rain The maiden kneels before the gate At evening when it’s getting late A silent kiss she softly blows And places there a single rose And down within the catacombs Where people say a creature roams In the darkness still and deep You can hear a young man weep |
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unpredictable_mortal Junior Member
since 2007-01-27
Posts 10Malaysia |
It is an awesomely well-done poem. I couldn't stop painting an image in my mind. I really enjoyed reading it and keep up the good work!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
sewasham An epic poem and a good read, enjoyed. |
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ivordavies Senior Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 739Chester, England |
I fear my friend you write too well and capture us within your spell This story must move on to end to quench the thirst of virtual friend So once again take parchments quill our appetites you must fulfill! |
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Jess Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 243Washington |
What a great story. It reminded me of Beauty and the Beast mixed in with the Hunchback of Notre Dame. Very well written. Loved it |
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DreamerSpirit Member
since 2006-10-02
Posts 240Buenos Aires, Argentina |
Excellent, just excellent..i enjoyed every word..it's excellent.. thanks for sharing! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wow!! just beautiful!! RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
wow Steve I lost myself in this one wonderful tale... going back for another read |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A compelling read! I had to read it a second time to absorb it and see it playing out in my mind's eye! The first time through, I gobbled your words up, so to speak, for I wanted to read what was coming up next! Linda |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Thank you all for commenting, this was my humble attempt at Epic poetry. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Just too good... I love an epic poem and this has all the right stuff. I thoroughly enjoyed this read tonight! Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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