Open Poetry #40 |
Words, just words to give |
Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
There are feelings that reflect this me My inner self that you can’t see One servant to humanity With words, just words to give I wish that I could guide each heart Before at end it breaks apart But then again the day does start And that is how we live I see the pain in they I know Feel the hurt that they don’t show Give the verse that seems to grow But nothing turns the past Write of what I feel is they In hope of peace and joy today In wonder of each yesterday That in the mind does last Joining with the Passions team So together we can scream Searching where the grass is green And gates are open wide Then we servants of the pen Write of life and blues again Searching, but not knowing when The muse stands by our side |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Joining with the Passions team So together we can scream Searching where the grass is green And gates are open wide Then we servants of the pen Write of life and blues again Searching, but not knowing when The muse stands by our side Yes, most definitely. Well done Rick. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
a beauty again. good! enjoyed |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Rick, Good last lines in the strophes. I'm afraid the rest comes across as rather forced. Bobby |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Hi Magnus, great to get your reply again my friend, thank you very much. Hi Drauntz, thanks for the visit and your reply, enjoyed. Hi Bobby, good to have you here, you could be right my friend, just writing as it comes to me, before I lose it forever. I wish it was all perfect for my book of poetry, but it will come as I practice. Enjoyed your honesty and your visit, thank you. |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Rick Your words always flow off my tongue as I read you out loud. You poems have an ease to them - and I really enjoy the postive messages which reflect who you are. Alison |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Hi, Rick! What common ground we stand upon with trembling quill to pen our hopes and apirations, or to just touch another heart. Great thoughts and a lovely poem, you have shared here. ~ K |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Hi Alison, lovely to have you visit today my friend, I enjoy your company each time and you wonderful comments. Have a great day and take care of yourself. Bye. Klassy Lassy, a pleasure to read you reply my friend, it was most enjoyed and heart felt, thank you very much. To you both my friend, good to see you here, not writing as much this week since at work, time to relax again soon, have a great day and take care. Rick |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Then we servants of the pen Write of life and blues again Searching, but not knowing when The muse stands by our side How very true. *S* And we're always sucking down the thread of fear that she'll not return. *S* Superb write, my friend... beginning to end! *S* |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
*S*, thank you for your wonderful comment today my friend, it was much enjoyed and heart felt, Great to see you here, till again, take care and be well. Rick |
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