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Open Poetry #40

sunburn

JeffD
Junior Member

since 2007-02-06

Posts 28
CT

0 posted 2007-07-02 08:51 PM

Sunburn

The red
Burning into flesh
Nothing depletes me more
No water left inside
And the pain is deep
Tearing away like a bandage
Leaving my skin raw and unworthy
No one can look at me
My horrid red skin just laughable
From a stupid kid
Who forgot his screen
A mask from the sun
To hide away from the light
But instead the beach was pure delight
I can't hide anymore
From the scourge in my side
Leaving me blind
From the pain deep inside

Sorry this is a first draft. I can't write right now on paper and I can only move my arms enough type because of the horrible sunburn I just got. Also word doesn't work on my computer. Thanks for reading

Dominique-Simone
Senior Member

since 2005-11-12

Posts 643

1 posted 2007-07-02 11:10 PM

I still thought it was well done

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

2 posted 2007-07-02 11:49 PM

cool write..for hot skin...lol

hope that sunburn stops burning soon!

hugs, g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

JeffD
Junior Member

since 2007-02-06

Posts 28
CT

3 posted 2007-07-03 04:13 PM

Thanks for the kind words. Yeah I was stuck at a beach helping my friend with his birthday party from 10:30 in the morning to five in the afternoon. Man was that a bad idea.

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