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Celtic reminisce
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Celtic reminisce |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia 
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CELTIC REMINISCE Its spirit flies above the plains Between the peaks and drenching rains And all the passion still remains To be so real and grand The spirit glides with wings so wide Amongst the scent of countryside And rides upon the changing tide While warm is still the hand To touch the soul of faraway So many miles from yesterday But like a light it guides the way Back to the Motherland And there we see the ancient Celt See and feel just how they felt While frozen streams they slowly melt I hear the bagpipes play And melody is ever sweet As jokers and the workers meet In pubs, the friends upon their seat Who share what was their day And I in mood of reminisce Do wonder of the things I miss The Celtic way and warming kiss Does send me on my way To stand on shore of home once more To share in time with those before To find at end the open door Where memories come to stay And I can shout hello and bye Wave my hand with cheer and cry Greet those passed who never die Till vision fades away |
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RogueandPoet Member
since 2007-06-04
Posts 126Oregon |
I really like reading your submissions, they are artistic and yet accessible. I hope I'm not out of line but one line threw me off, "I hear the bagpipes play".I felt this one line threw off the rhyming scheme. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
RogueandPoet, so glad to get your reply my friend, I am trying different types of verse, in each verse here I have three rhyming lines and the forth different, it is a trial for me. I pictured a stream melting of ice and then hearing distant spirit bagpipes of they now gone. You will find all the next verses, on the last line onward all rhyme. Thank you for your observation and letting me know, it is appreciated and a shared moment. Take care and be well. Rick |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Rick I like this a lot. I kind of liked the bag pipe line .. it fit well for me, but I was listening to their haunting wail. I loved the rhyming sequence of this poem and enjoy how you try other styles of poetry. I am trying the same and sometimes -- it is hard. Anyway, I look for your poems and hope all is well with you. You are among my favorites here -- as a poet and a person. Alison |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Rick, this is a wonderful poem and rhyme scheme! Keep on experimenting! I adore it! |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Alison, how wonderful to read your comments my friend, thank you so much, for making the joy of writing even more so. I will be trying different things and keep everyone guessing hey. Be well and take care. Dear Dixie, thank you for the comments here my friend, always look forward to your visit, it brings something special to my day. I adore you and your time here. Have a wonderful day my friends, till again we speak. Rick |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
Grandfather from scotland, when I think of him I hear the sound of bagpipes playing amazing grace~ would love to go there someday~ thanks for your beautiful words and vision~ My spirit will rise |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
So glad you heard the bagpipes my friend and it brought back some memories, happy my words could provide Rick |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I absolutely loved this Rick and think it possibly one of your best yet. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme and the flow of this. Read aloud, it is so smooth and the content? Wonderful, it gave me such a happy and peaceful feeling. I so enjoy reading your offerings, I am always left smiling. Kudo's to you m'friend.  
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Gentle Spirit Lovely to have you visit, thank you so much for your generous comments, all were very much heart felt. Kudo's to you as well my friend, here I am left smiling. Have a great day. Rick |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
beautiful and beautiful style. enjoyed |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Thanks Rick and you have a great day, too. |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Drauntz, thank you again for your visit, enjoyed. Rick |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Your meter is perfect throughout. Lovely piece  Ruth |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Thank you Ruth for your reply here my friend, much appreciated, great to have you visit. Rick |
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Dominique-Simone Senior Member
since 2005-11-12
Posts 643 |
The rhythm is awesome. Keep it up. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
I normally don't like reading poetry that is of a set rhyming patter... this, however, is a very firm exception. This is the first of your thoughts that I have read.... yet, it definately will not be the last. What would you attempt to do...if you knew you could not fail?. |
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Arius Miura de Galdri Member
since 2007-07-04
Posts 90Michigan, USA |
I've been waiting for just the right poem to grab me before I posted a response to anything, and this is definitely that poem. All of the ones of yours that I've read recently have been wonderful; the rhyme scheme, the rhythm, and especially the phrasing really drew me into what you were trying to convey. Thank you for sharing, AMdG |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dominique-Simone, thank you so much for your reply, much appreciated. Ringo, I am so glad you took the exception and read my work, always grand to have new visitors and chat a while, look forward to the next cuppa when you visit, thank you. Arius Miura de Galdri, it is a pleasure to share with you my friend, welcome to Passions in Poetry, I believe you will enjoy the site and posts that you read, thank you so much for your kind comments, very much appreciated and heart felt. To you all my friends, again thank you so much for making this day special with all your replies, have a wonderful day. Rick |
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