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Open Poetry #40

Obligations

howardtsu
Senior Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 678

0 posted 2007-06-30 02:50 PM

Eve didn't like watching the waterfront anymore

it used to be an “eyesoar”

               but without Howard's store

               filling her memorys with lore

she couldn't bear to look at the score

happy tourists of all ages walking across the new floors

everyday from her apartment across the street she'd watch people pass the through the new Walgreen doors

          and she ached for Howard more and more

why didn't she give him the rapport

                             he needed

                   she could have conceded

but the more he implored

the more she ignored

                              his décor

he left her defeated

                     was it too late to adore?

silently she dreamed

but her heart screamed

                              for justice

                                                                       love,

                                                                       eve

Robert Jordan
Member

since 2007-02-07

Posts 392
Philadelphia Pa USA

1 posted 2007-06-30 04:03 PM

Howardsu,

This is rather badly forced. Try for more imagination in your end rhymes.

Bobby

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