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Open Poetry #40

in your eyes

MarkG
Junior Member

since 2007-06-21

Posts 48
California USA

0 posted 2007-06-27 12:56 PM

in your eyes

in your eyes an innocent child
in your eyes lost and wild
in your eyes everything that’s right
in your eyes as dark as night

in your eyes I found my home
in your eyes now I’m left alone
in your eyes forever you’d stay
in your eyes now far away

in your eyes I saw so much
in your eyes I could never touch
in your eyes you’ll never let go
in your eyes your wayward soul

in your eyes were beautiful dreams
in your eyes now painful scenes
in your eyes I once could trust
in your eyes no longer love

in your eyes I saw a friend
in your eyes I now see the end
in your eyes are goodbye tears
in your eyes what I always feared

in your eyes I’ll remember us
in your eyes the last picture of
in your eyes I no longer see
in your eyes just you and me

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

1 posted 2007-06-27 01:21 AM

very good. and romantic.
to read a romantic poem at night, good.

enjoyed

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2007-06-27 02:12 AM

Mark.... I like your style here..

RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

3 posted 2007-06-27 03:53 AM

the eyes are the windows to the soul...

~ARH

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

4 posted 2007-06-27 06:26 AM

In my eyes I see words of vision and a poet, enjoyed, thank you for sharing.

Rick

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2007-06-27 07:28 AM

I loved the repetition in phrasing and the many poignant sentiments you were able to draw out with each line. Well done Mark, much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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