Open Poetry #40 |
May 4 |
Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I think I'm in a reflective mood today... more thoughts of my first love, I can't remember if I have posted this one before or not, my apologies if I have... RDB It’s your Birthday today And my thoughts have been of you my love I wonder what you would be like at 45 I wonder what lessons you would have learned I wonder what loves you would have had I wonder how your features would have changed I wonder if I would still be part of your life today My memories are so full of you and the things we shared Those sparkling brown eyes that would melt me with every look That cheeky mischievous smile that would bring laughter my way The red tousled hair that never was tamed and that I would never tame Your generous spirit and kind hearted words Your fun loving nature and the unfortunate need for speed on that fateful day I wonder if you knew how much I was in love with you I wonder if you knew I wish I could have been your love You will always be mine Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has a battle to fight.........<\b> |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"I wish I could have been your love You will always be mine" oh Roniece this one breaks my heart |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Roniece, A sad but wonderful write. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Kate... thank you my sweet friend Sir Sy... thank you, I appreciate you taking the time to leave a comment on my work |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
straight from the heart |
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trutodaraiders Senior Member
since 2006-12-02
Posts 820CA |
I love your writings...so subtle, no hidden messages. I dont have to re-read it a million times to try to figure out what you are saying. In your critique you say "I have never really considered myself a Poet, I just write things from my heart I think some of us poets worry to much about meter, structure, and mind boggling words and forget whats on our hearts at the moment. ~Bill |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Dixie... thank you gorgeous girl Bill... thank you my sweet friend - your comments are valued! RDB |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
writing things from your heart is always an with an embossed signature on it....and what makes a poet unique....no fear of putting feelings down in words...meter, rhyme, no matter...to each his own...and I don't know when critique will understand, it is not what is trendy, it is about the person inside, what they enjoy, what they don't enjoy...and I believe so much really good material today, is passed by, due to aloof critiques who perceive they know it all...sad.... your writes are soul searching lessons...enjoyed by many, thank you always for sharing.... |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
oh Lee, you are so sweet - thank you so much for your lovely comment... RDB |
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Beatrice Boyle Member
since 2006-12-06
Posts 438 |
This is lovely Roniece...one never fogets their first love. The memory of that intoxicating feeling, lasts a lifetime, even when the love itself fades. Bea |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Grandma Bea... thank you I appreciate your comments RDB |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Thanks for sharing this...James |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
A lovely heartfelt piece RD-B. Thankyou for sharing. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
James.... thank you Chris.... thank you very much I appreciate you reading my work... RDB |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your mind, your smile, your heart, your spirit, and your writing, are all beautiful!!! Giving you a big hug-o-love, Linda |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
We all tend to reflect back upon our first love at times throughout our lives and wonder how or who they would be now. What a nice reflective piece. Thanks so much for the comment on my poem They Never Knew. I am in that group of Passion's first members though don't come "home" as often as I'd like anymore. There are hundreds of my poems in the archives Ruth I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Oh…wow. This is so beautiful. What wonderfully written sweet words. JL Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No apologies necessary... our first loves are so very special. Some, more than others. But then there are third fifth and seventh loves... all should be remembered as fondly. Well done, Roniece Enjoyed fully. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Karilea... thank you my sweet friend - your comments were lovely RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
A first love is a precious thing. And one that ends before it really starts is a tragedy, but also--it never spoiled, life never crushed it. I like the way you wrote this one, it's simple and straight-forward, and touching. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Awwww, this is so sad. You wrote of this sadness, beautifully. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Nan... thank you he was very special to me and his memory is precious RDB SweetSue... thank you, I appreciate you commenting on my work... I love reading your words ... RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Reflection is good if done with love as this obviously was, and when reflection is good hearing it again doesn't matter. a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Sadly beautiful. Nicely done. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Kethry & Sewashwam.... thank you for your lovely comments on my work ... much appreciated RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Roniece....I remember now, because of this poem, someone that I loved from afar many years ago...he had red hair. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Roniece~ Ah ... the blessed remembers of that 'first love' ... Mine still lives in the same town I live in ... we are truly good, good friends ... we've often discussed the what if's and we both agree that we would pick one another all over again~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Sighhh...fate's bitter kiss..It has often stung my heart. This is beautiful!! |
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