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Open Poetry #40

Thought, word, deed

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2007-06-17 12:36 PM

Words will be forgotten
and deeds a sometimes dream
when I hear the laughter
of the “been there, done that”.

But I’m not unmindful of
the joke of mortal life
rolling, rolling, unfulfilled
into the shadow lands
where laughter greets the agony
of having lived and loved.

In time and in the by-and-by
I too will laugh amused
but the knowing no reprieve
from wishes, hopes, and needs
stuck within the framework
of the one I am today.

And there’s that glue of love
like a mind unbreakable
holding everything combined
and fussing like a little child
for intense visual impact
to kill off the attachments.

This is you and this is me
involved in thought, word, deed,
until laughter overtakes a need,
and we find a wish came true
in a manner not the same
as we hoped for every day!

Helen / 17 June 2007

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2007-06-17 05:19 PM

Nice...James

lacydee
Member

since 2007-06-17

Posts 130
Indiana

2 posted 2007-06-17 06:22 PM

very pretty, I liked it a lot. lacydee

as for me and my house, we will serve the Lord.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

3 posted 2007-06-17 09:31 PM

I like the last stanza particularly "this is in me and in you" line. Very well done.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

4 posted 2007-06-17 11:58 PM

beautiful, indeed,

enjoyed

aziza
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since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

5 posted 2007-06-18 01:42 AM

But I’m not unmindful of
the joke of mortal life
rolling, rolling, unfulfilled
into the shadow lands
where laughter greets the agony
of having lived and loved.

Ah, you took my breath away with that.
Great writing.

Alison

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2007-06-18 02:39 AM

Thanks everyone for your kind comments. Much appreciated.

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