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Open Poetry #40

[green, / o green]

shirtless
Member

since 2006-04-29

Posts 359

0 posted 2007-06-09 11:08 AM

green,
o green

but the sun
it sucks me
brown and yellow

I want to say
I love you
when I no longer
need you

I am the sweet grass
that can only dance
when my hands
are empty

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

1 posted 2007-06-10 07:13 PM

nice.

"I am the sweet grass
that can only dance
when my hands
are empty"...interesting. still thinking about it.

adagio
Member

since 2005-03-19

Posts 449
Marrero, La.

2 posted 2007-06-11 03:56 PM

Yeah I wonder too! might even call it intreged
Adagio

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2007-06-15 09:14 PM

Good to read your powerful words again...

GAWD I love this, especially the imagery of the last stanza.

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

4 posted 2007-06-16 06:23 PM

Love the analogy here.

Sure wish we'd get a little rain. Too much sun ain't good.

miscellanea

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2007-06-16 10:33 PM

Anthony~
Your penning intrigues me ... I like this and yet I'm not even sure why~
Does that make ANY sense to you?

Well ... that's my story and it's sticking to me~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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