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Sally and Felix Go Downtown
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Sally and Felix Go Downtown |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA 
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Now you have to understand, Sally and Felix are a little more than a little rough around the edges. They can be brutal as hell. Foster care didn’t leave them with real nice dispositions. They’re still young, and haven’t had a chance to forget it all. You better believe they hate you. They let you know that, as soon as they open their mouths. Oh yeah, they look sweet and innocent enough, with their clear acne free faces. Look close though at Felix’s knuckles. He has “HATE” scratched on both fists. That’s not too traditional is it? You’re supposed to have “LOVE” scratched on at least one set of fingers. Not to be outdone, Sally has “SCREW YOU” scratched across her bare, exposed, shoulder blades. She has a disturbingly rude habit, of turning her torso, and flashing it in your face. They get on the El at Girard Station, sprawl themselves on the floor, and start yelling back and forth to each other. “Hey Felix, is this just about the dumbest looking bunch of creeps you ever laid eyes on or what? Talk about ugly too, oh yeah, uh huh” “Yeah Sally, they’re real losers. You can bet they never seen nothing like us before.” “That’s because they’re all from nice families. Just look at them, sitting there all clean and pretty. We’re from a bad neighborhood folks, that’s what turns us so mean and bitter.” “Sally, fold your legs in, people are staring at them. You don’t want to give people the wrong idea or nothing. Hey guy, see something you like?” About this time, the train pulls into Fairmont Station. (Fairmont Station’s not there any more. So you’ll have to wait for Spring Garden to make your escape.) Bunches of people get off. They have decided they really don’t need to get downtown that fast after all. They’d rather take their time, and relax standing on the platform. It’s loads of fun waiting for the next train. Sally and Felix laugh their heads off. Bobby |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hey Bob Yanno, I love reading you for many reasons...first and formost the story content, second, knowing both Philly and NYC, brings it up close and personal, yanno, and third, because your an exceptional writer, 4th, because deep down, I believe your writing from extensive experience or research? and I ain't just a whislin Dixie...  and thanks so much for Muck Charles in Hell’s Kitchen Loved this just as much....don't believe it would be easy to shake experiences as a foster kid...some good, some not so good. somehow, I know, that you and your wife would be exceptional and interesting conversationalists... |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
LeeJ, Thanks for the kind words on this poem. Sally and Felix never did marry, they do however, remain very good, and close friends, even after fifty some years. Bobby |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine continuance of the story! applause! |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Secondhanddreampoet, Thanks for the kind words. I'm pleased you are enjoying the series. Sally and Felix send their best. Bobby |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I tried to write one similar to this style a few moons ago...James |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Yo James, Go for it Babe, you can do it. Just let it all hang out. Bobby |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Interesting series. And I am sure there are many more episodes you can write. martyjo |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Latearrival, I'm pleased you are finding the series of interest. Yes, all my series tend to turn into books. Thanks for the kind words. Bobby [This message has been edited by Robert Jordan (06-12-2007 06:55 PM).] |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
It touches deeply. |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Drauntz, Thanks for the kind words. I'm pleased it got to you. We did get a lot of joy out of those El rides. Bobby |
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