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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest 
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secret song I think it was on Rue Bastille that sidewalk café I know it was morning sun watched blue paint flake from the chair opposite me waiter called me my lady my fingers prodded uneven rind of Chaource seeking the soft pâte a distraction nothing more bitter coffee suited me I dreamed of time as told by the red Murano clock you brought me from Venice and the empty green sky you left behind small boy gone from his mother's side chased birds crumbpecking under my table flutter of wings then the call Robin venez ici come here no boy no birds waiter please send me a guitar player with a secret song oh my lady never in the morning in the morning you must deal with alone alone |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
very beautiful. You always write as soft as your name. enjoyed. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Drauntz what a nice thing to say |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh gads.... you do manage to string some bitter from the sweet... and then you marmalade minds.... and bittersweet is the mix. Well done, m'friend. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
ah Karilea, my friend it's that old love thing telling me stories again thank you |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
It's as if you play my heart like that guitar -- I feel every word you write and I see every picture you paint. You are an artist. Alison |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you Alison  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
that last line...wow Kate wow |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ahh Kate that love thing gets us every time heh? Love this sweet lady. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Kate - You set the scene so very well and concluded with a truth applicable to many. Excellent! |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Lady Kate... such vivid imagery pulls one into the scene you paint, like an exquisit woven tapestry.. and compels them to be an observer within. The conclusion plucks at the heart string to reverberate and resonate a feeling that touches deep in the soul. " in the morning you must deal with alone alone" ... with only a smoldering ember of a warm memory moment to remind you of its worth. Thank you so much for sharing this, Milady. Much felt... much truth... much enjoyed. MoonShadow . |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you dear Dixie you know that line yourself, yes? ah gentle Donna I love/hate love, you know? yeh, you know hugs thank you Honeybunch Kenneth I am so glad you enjoyed |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
grand-fine 'slice of life' (impressionism)! I really LOVED reading this 'write'! serious, long sustained applause!! |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
such a melody of sorrow |
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Mr»ÄlleÿÇät Member
since 2001-06-02
Posts 190 |
A lovely lonely song my dear |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you so much poet thank you for hearing my song Helen Mr»ÄlleÿÇät thank you |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
In the morning you must deal with alone alone.. Man, how I wish I had written that line.The scope of meaning in it is monumental....beautiful. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is beautiful... and the way you played the words down the page is more than artful. The Lady--yanno? It shows. You ARE a lady indeed. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
thank you kindly Balladeer I try to be a lady Karen but it gets away from me sometimes you know?  thank you |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
ah Lady Kate... I will be returning to the Rue Bastille in 3months I can't wait ! i will look for the waiter for you ... just lovely words here... RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...wonderful...wonderful... Yes there are times when we must deal with alone...alone...James |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
he was short with a mustache Roniece have a wonderful trip my friend how well you know this James thank you |
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