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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2007-01-19 11:57 AM

~~**~~
{Searching for OZ series, a ramble of heavy heart}

~~**~~
This night

of wind and thick   air

when  remembered by
the touch of your goodbye

I tasted          the rain
long before it became the fall of storm
long before it became the fall of season

this one night:

I wanted my words to cast upon you
soft as the day we let light
linger into early morning

But the rain was frozen

between layers

between us

I whispered

This is what  its like --
         true silence

I’ll     describe it here: {in sketching thought}

it’s     beautiful,  it’s            damaged

the way:

water trembles upon the petals

the way:
      sounds of water   break

the way:

colors wash        away

again I whispered: true silence; pressed palms

please

I pray for sleep
that I may awake
to gentle eyes

so winter will not need a reason

to stand alone

and I will not fear the reason

of broken

~~**~~
Life is a balance
of holding on and letting go (KU)

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2007-01-19 12:03 PM

exquisite Lady L~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2007-01-19 12:11 PM

I tasted the rain
long before it became the fall of storm
long before it became the fall of season

this one night:

I wanted my words to cast upon you
soft as the day we let light
linger into early morning

But the rain was frozen

between layers

between us

There is only one who captures a scene such as this like you, and it's great reading you.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2007-01-19 01:43 PM

I pray for sleep
that I may awake
to gentle eyes

so winter will not need a reason

to stand alone

and I will not fear the reason

of broken

exceptional, flowing softly yet with great valor...

loved this

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

4 posted 2007-01-19 03:39 PM

1derful write

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2007-01-19 03:43 PM

"I wanted my words to cast upon you
soft as the day we let light
linger into early morning
But the rain was frozen
between layers
between us
I whispered
This is what its like --
true silence"

Love this!!
Perfect!

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

6 posted 2007-01-19 04:03 PM

Simply lovely~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
An invincible summer.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2007-01-19 04:17 PM

To me, this sounds like you are hurting, but you sure put it down in a beautiful way.
Sandra

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2007-01-20 02:30 AM

Enjoyed...James

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

9 posted 2007-01-20 05:33 AM

Lauren.... this was simply awesome! thank you for sharing this with us

RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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