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secondhanddreampoet
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0 posted 2007-05-25 08:50 PM



        The Prison

On this storm-fevered night...
as the flashing light-tongues
lick indifferent clouds
in an ever-glowering sky,
my mind wanders...
(behind eyes that flicker
   and glaze with sorrow)
in abstruse meanderings.
My heart lies in ashes
on life’s cold-stone hearth;
and, my soul is just a
   phantom shade
fading in a broken mirror...
here...where I stand
alone again and lost
   to the smoke and rain,
with nothing but  
   ramshackle dreams
and permafrost memories...
of the day her love died,
and ‘poetry’ became my prison!

© Copyright 2007 Bruce E. Adams Jr. - All Rights Reserved
Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905
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1 posted 2007-05-25 11:25 PM


again a very beautiful piece. I always wonder if you write your poem just in one breath as I read it. it is truly a good one.

poem, just like you said here, like a prison to hold a poet and torture him both mentally and physically. One can not escape out without break down something.

enjoyed as always

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
2 posted 2007-05-26 06:49 AM


So very sad, but painted with such intensity and beauty.  

Poetry may be the prison into which you withdraw, but it is also the breath which sustains you, comforts you and with which you "pick yourself up, dust yourself off and start all over again" - at least with living with all your senses, albeit without her.

Wishing you sunshine on your shoulders

- Owl

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
3 posted 2007-05-26 10:15 AM


secondhanddreampoet
With the pointillism of Seurat you have painted a fine picture. Enjoyed

Midnitesun
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Gaia
4 posted 2007-05-28 08:01 AM


~a sad exhale~
a true artist at work,
brushstroking the canvas
with empathy
for everyone
who has loved...and lost

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