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Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

0 posted 2007-05-25 06:50 PM

There is a dream inside a dream,
A silence within a scream.
I'm wide awake the more I sleep,
The Earth starts to fumble and creep.
I saw Heaven in your eyes,
When I'm God everybody dies.
Everything I show you is a piece of my death,
Down to the very last cold breath.
Lead the rats through the streets,
Dance like marionettes swaying to the beats.
I saw Heaven in your eyes,
When I'm God everybody dies.
There is a hope inside a hate,
A salvation tied into one's fate.
The Symphony of Destruction plays it's tunes,
Leaving a path of decaying dunes.
I saw Heaven in your eyes,
When I'm God everybody dies.
You take a mortal man and put him in control,
Watch him become a God as the wheels roll.
I saw Heave in your EYES,
WHEN I'M GOD EVERYBODY DIES!
When I'm God in peace all shall rest,
And on plays the Symphony...

you can feel my ANGER you can feel my pain you can see my TORMENT driving me insane

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

1 posted 2007-05-25 07:08 PM

wow, this is good poem. a wonderful one with deep meaning. after the bite,every one died.
but you are right, if the dead one became God, then still every would die too.

very good one.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

2 posted 2007-05-25 09:15 PM

I especially LOVE the ‘entry lines’
of this powerful ‘write’:

“There is a dream inside a dream,
A silence within a scream(!)”;

as to:

“The Earth starts to fumble and creep.”

[as a geologist, I can’t attest to a ‘fumbling
and creeping Earth’?!...however, I would argue
that humans have, most certainly, been ‘fumbling
and creeping’ (and playing their ‘symphony of
Destruction’) for millenia!]

Applause on this ‘write’!

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2007-05-27 11:49 AM

Hot Flakes, there must have been fire in your fingers as you keyed this earth-shaking poem! Wow! There is so much power and force in all your poetry.

I especially appreciated your opening stanza ~

"There is a dream inside a dream,
A silence within a scream.
I'm wide awake the more I sleep,
The Earth starts to fumble and creep."

Great writing!

EA

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