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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2007-05-22 01:53 PM


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Spring
Very late
In afternoon

Blue sky— snow
White clouds above
Deep pink haze

Sparrows
Among branches
Honey bees
From flower to flower

At dusk
In the peach orchard
Her faint perfume


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Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16
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1 posted 2007-05-22 02:10 PM



dear John, you are writing the "universe" in your not quite long poems.

"Spring
Very late
In afternoon".... time

"Blue sky— snow
White clouds above
Deep pink haze"...colors and softness

"Sparrows
Among branches
Honey bees
From flower to flower"...life

"At dusk
In the peach orchard
Her faint perfume".... of course, the last... human or the bloom but you have mentioned flower above, so this "her" must be a human figure.

beautiful and again, very beautiful.


secondhanddreampoet
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2 posted 2007-05-22 07:59 PM


most pleasant minimalistic 'impressionism'!

enjoyed!!

passing shadows
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3 posted 2007-05-22 10:11 PM


nice
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4 posted 2007-05-23 09:56 AM


You pen is a brush... painting vivid pictures for our pleasure... Beautiful!
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