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| Open Poetry #40 |
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A poem |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
This is the blue bird That is the persimmon tree And the waving sea Sun is in her morning bath With a pink rose and green tea What is that yonder? Oh, It’s my dream |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bao~ And your 'dream' is lovely too~ Couldn't help but notice the reference to the Persimmon Tree ... Bill and I have about 30 of them growing on our land~  I make a really GOOD Persimmon Cake~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
how nice to know. I love persimmons. sooooooooo jealous. love you Marge. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet! And I can't recall if I have tasted persimmon (I don't think I even spelled it right, huh?) Sometimes simplicity is just the right note! Enjoyed.  |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Beautiful images expressed Hope |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, the beauty of simplicity.....you do it well |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Very lovely. A |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
this is really sweet, tender and gentle, just like a dream. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
very nice~~ M |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
What about them poem writers Ain't they fine? Writin' down words And makin' them rhyme Wanna be poem writer? Got a little muse? Write a little diddy Like I tried for youse |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I wondered about "persimmon" and I found out that we call it "khaki or loto" and I love it. Thirty, dear Marge, wow! And I love your poem, dear Drauntz. The essentials of a dream of peace, glimpses of Nature in harmony. Beautiful. Love, Margherita  |
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MindBodySoul Member
since 2007-01-10
Posts 196NJ |
So lovely, is this write! It brought me peace this morning. Thank you for sharing!! Jen |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 Persimmons are a traditonal fruit at Japanese holiday get-togethers, at least in California, my original home state. Sigh, bluebirds and the sea....I miss that beautiful sea scenery! I truly enjoyed the aromatic and tasty visual imagery in this sweet write! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Awwww, experiencing your "poem" is the sort of pause that refreshes! Thanks! ~ I needed that! Have a glorious day! EA |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
I really like this Drauntz. My only suggestion would be to maybe re-think the title but that's just me. Good work! Cheers - Ed Head Cheese & Chicken Feet |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A tanka... with lace. Well done, Drauntz. |
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