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Mother's Begging
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Mother's Begging |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
Chilly wind crying With the lost dream of poplar Fist pounded on door Storm whirled me out Shivering to winter's moon blinding me from shout A familiar voice In begging for a blankie aired her dignity Mother, the greatest being |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bao~ My friend ... I feel the real of this ... the beauty~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A "Mother's begging" tugs at our hearts and your very deep and powerful poem conveys this message with impressive intensity. Love, Margherita |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
true story of my childhood. when I was 8. My father was suspected as spy (he is not)so one night they came to take him. children in BJ were taken outside when the apartment was thoroughly searched and they dig a hole on the wall for looking for transmitter. My mother begged them for balnkets for us. It was November. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
what a beautiful memory, of a mother's nurturing love |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Well done Thank you for sharing the power of your poem and the story behind it. A |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
this was wonderful, tugging at our heartstrings. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bao~  -ing this one for other's to read~Your explanation is a beautiful story in itself~ Lovely, my friend~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
completely touches the heart.... |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
This stunningly powerful poem tears at the heart strings...A must read for all...I hope you don't mind but I am taking a copy of it to share with the ladies I get together with once a month for lunch...today is our day and this poem will be the topic...Thank you for sharing it with us...*Big Hugs* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This touched my heart.. even more so after you told the story. Heart hugs to you dear one. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
Thank you all. I, as it happened as life went on later, have never got comforted on this because my father was gone for next ten years and mother was worring about how she was going to raise three young children 5,8,11 then. She tried to committed suicide twice but gave up by thinking that my younger brother was too young to live without a mother (she told us when we were adults) I wrote this poem for my mother on this mother’s day But I never thought that this opened this never healed wound and I hope it will get healed by your kind hearts who understand the feelings. I have never shared this with HB or other friends. I have never talked this with my parents because I thought that it was a moment that nobody wants to mention. Too much for an 8 years to hold though. Now I am crying like a baby. Thank you again for all of you. I love you all. |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
Drauntz: Thank you for opening your heart and memory to all of us, so we can share a little of what you went through as a child. What a wonderful mother you have! What a terrible thing for your family to go through! Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Betty Senior Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 1159Virginia |
I think this is so pretty & heart felt. |
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MegMeg Member
since 2007-05-14
Posts 85Virginia |
i like it, short yet effective. |
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Flutterwings Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 288Maine |
Your poem was very effective! It touched me deeply. I find that expression emotions through poetry is a great way to rid the feelings of our inner most wounds. We all have them and some are harder to heal then others. Keep writing. Love and peace, Maggie ((~.~)) |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I'm so glad Marge gave me a heads up so I wouldn't miss this. It's beautiful and I'm thankful you've shared your story with us. How could one forget such trauma, especially being so young? Your appreciation of your mother's caring is in itself so heartwarming. Rae |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am literally all choked up after reading this short but powerfully evocative piece of writing ~ and your explanations. Your tears fall on fertile ground, dear Poetess. Loving, compassionate hug, EA |
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PatAngel Member
since 2004-04-05
Posts 451California |
So beautiful! It touched my heart.Thank you for sharing. Patricia 'When you find a dream within your heart, don't ever let it go. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
without the explanation I couldn't honestly respond not understanding the anguish you went through and the love of a "Mother's Begging". (thank you for the time you took and pain of remembering in sharing the details. M |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This leaves spaces that allows the reader to become the heroine.... nicely done, Drauntz. (and fade to black, yes?)  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I to have been touched by all that is here... extremely profound! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Very poignant poem and story. I have heard similar war stories from friends, and it saddens even the hardest heart. Have you ever thought about writing it out from an 8-year old's perspective? It could be a very informative story for others to read and try to understand, and very healing for you. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
Thank you all very much. I try to take this opportunity to get over the hurt Dear Mysteria, thank you for your suggestion. To tell you the truth, I do not know what I was thinking then. I sat on the cold cement stairs, watching people going in and out and finally see my father who was held by two people on the arms faded into the dark. It was midnight and I was led out when I was sleeping. When my mother cried to beg for the blankets for us I almost said ‘ mom, I am not that cold.” I do not remember that I felt anything. (scary and shocking went under sub-consciousness, I guess). A week later, my mother told us “if your friends ask about your father, tell them that he goes work early and comes back late.” I lived in those words for two years. Had been there other adults to comfort us, This might not be this painful... I don’t know. Again Thank you all with my heart. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I love the blankie line, it's so childlike a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you for sharing this moment in time with us here. What images are captured in your words and the one that shouts the clearest for me is that of a mother's love for her children. My writing about these memories bring healing to your heart and soul. Hugs  Ruth I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
In Great Haiku form the Greatest nature picture: Great, Human Nature: an innocent child, in between scheming kids pranks, cries for Mom's blankie. copyright dwgpoet 2007 |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
this is so sweet,,,,the idea of asking for the blankie, which equals security--wonderful. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Such things a mother and a family will do to survive a system that deeply tries to control them.... |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Beautiful, Drauntz, written by a beautiful soul. My tears flow for your pain, both then and now. Please don't be shocked, or think that I don't understand, if I say that there are reasons why I envy you. - Owl |
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