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Slow Mourning |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas 
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An answer to my own challenge.... He picked the rose, so gentle Its crimson petals cradled His tears fall, detrimental Remembering their love so fabled Longing for time to remove him To a place in the past she dwelled But the hourglass, so loathsome Pinched the sands as slowly, the fell As her last sweet breath escaped her She pleaded for reprieve Her lover, chained still by horror Had watched as her soul took leave The forge of time now beckons him Move forward it demands But the will of hammering escapes him A blacksmith cursed with porcelain hands My child's smile tells me there's still hope |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Hello Kris, You have indeed met your own challenge beautifully! Well done indeed.  In the midst of winter, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautifully done, and challenge well met |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hi, Kris! I am pleased that you posted this lovely poem in Open for it will have more people reading it than if it were posted in Challenges.  I enjoyed your rendition in answer to your own challenge! As a matter of fact, the others did a great job in meeting it as well! Don't be such a stranger, Soldier Man! It was a pleasure to read your poetry again! Giving you a warm hug 'n smile, Linda |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Enchantress I thank you for your kind words. As always, they make me feel like I'm at home. LeeJ I have only read a few of your posts as I have been estranged from the forums for some time, but I do so enjoy finding new poets that are talented.....and this place has more than its share. EarthAngel, it seems funny to hear "soldier man" again. Those days seem so long ago. Now the only marching I do is pacing to get our little girl to sleep. Although, I do find this type of soldiering much more rewarding. I think I may have just found my next topic. I guess you have been my muse for this. thank you!!! My child's smile tells me there's still hope |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Hello Kris... this was a lovely read! thank you for sharing it with us ... I hope to read more of your work here... RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I read this earlier and was in awe still am |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
beautiful |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kris~ Much applause :applause: and it is always good to see you hear~ I love the thought of you marching in place to the tune of a lullabye~  Adorable~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Thanks again guys. Yeah Marge, I like the beat of this drum a lot better...although Kylie is a lot more demanding than any CO I have ever had, and SO much prettier. My child's smile tells me there's still hope |
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