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Love Spirals Downwards Until It is Naught.
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Love Spirals Downwards Until It is Naught. |
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Andrew Sewell Junior Member
since 2007-04-16
Posts 24County Durham, England |
Love Spirals Downwards Until It Is Naught I caught a whiff of emptiness It tore my heart right back Sold to her upon a whim Too many times, lost track I am the lonely one inside Lacking judgement or pride She was the earth and I the moon Erratic orbits in my head I live in dream, with my eyes closed Not watching where I tread Too blind to see when things were wrong A torch I carried far too long Twist a line around the sun Surprised when I am burned Falling star, not risen far Deserve the fate that I have earned An empty love I can’t defend But far too weak to meet the end. Andrew "Writing is not necessarily something to be ashamed of, but do it in private and wash your hands afterwards." - R.A. Heinlein. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very romantic, melancholic write, yet captivating. Love IS. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hello, Andrew. Your title "Love Spirals Downwards Until It Is Naught" is an apt title indeed. A romantic, yet sadly sweet, penning.  EA |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
poor thing. But love is always great. I love this one to show the gentle torture of love your poem won my whole symapthy. very good. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
upon viewing the title I thought, trust is broken, love is contaminated...but upon reading the poem, there is so so much more to derive....bittersweet and open emotions, written very well... |
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