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Open Poetry #40

A place

MindBodySoul
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since 2007-01-10

Posts 196
NJ

0 posted 2007-04-29 03:28 PM

Jen--->MindBodySoul

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2007-04-29 04:00 PM

if it's not enough then move on. Clearly you are putting your heart in the wrong place.

very emotinal write, one thing I would say, is the "lol" doesn't seem right in the poem. But that is just my personal opinion.

MindBodySoul
Member

since 2007-01-10

Posts 196
NJ

2 posted 2007-04-29 04:32 PM

Thanks for the observation... yes it does not fit..

I base my writing on things that I see, people that inspire me, situations that I can relate to... and direct experiences...

Jen--->MindBodySoul

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

3 posted 2007-04-30 12:40 PM

great photo-image;
[and, fine choice of lettering color with said image!]

once again, you write 'realism' VERY well!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2007-04-30 12:50 PM

loved the expression in this, the questions...the photo, extremely good and questions we have all asked at one time or another....

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

5 posted 2007-04-30 12:57 PM

as beautiful as before. I love the style. beautiful poem and beautiful picture.

oh, the sadness, the sadness. it is good that the writing is from last year.

enjoyed.

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