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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Unexpected "Things had fallen Into dull routine Her job, his job Both too tired Romance faded Two exhausted souls" {quote W.Y.} Thirty years had wound their way through different avenues of life he was absolute and certain he would always have his wife she had become quite quiet, passive a listlessness engaged he meant to someday spark her passion and he'd get to it after his fashion And when the day came that time was on his hands he rushed home to greet her she'd give in to his commands for nothing would deter him to reach her inner soul he would make her love again this was now his obsessive goal the house was quiet, the rooms were dim she was not there waiting for him, so he showered and shaved and robed his frame hoped she'd be ready to play some games The grand clock ticked then chimed the hour he wondered at her lateness now beyond his dinner hour he thought to light candles it had been quite awhile but surely in candlelight he would see her smile time passed on slowly wonder turned to worry he called her office, no answer, grew surly he checked the machine no message was there he slowly ran his fingers through his thinning hair his emotion, now anger led him to her room he cast about for answers no idea of pending doom then found her note, ah! as he had suspected! but as he read through her words were unexpected When you get home I won't be here I've had enough of your misery, dear You don't see me like you had before and no longer will I return to your door. You haven't needed me for some time now so I'll seek happiness and maybe somehow I'll find me again even on my own I know this is unexpected but this is no longer my home. 01.20.01 |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 sad stuffbut reality for some |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine If I had a wish I'd wish your dreams come true.  |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
this is my kind of tale well done Gloom |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Sad this is ... and sort of reminds me of another time and place~ /main/forumdisplay.cgi?action=displayarchive&number=24&topic=001953 Nicely done is this heart emote~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
... Well said Karilea. In the midst of winter, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
whew, a very sad story all to true many times... good writing... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Whoa! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ouch! Where's "Gift Of The Magi" when you really need it..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A sad tale that is a far too common scenario. You told it well ~ and I felt it. As is often the case with human nature, people are not fully appreciated until they have gone from our lives. Love & Sun Light, Linda |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Ditto! JL  Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed: |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie...Sad how this happens...I think I wrote something similar back when about two other people...love the rhyme in this and the clever way you told this story. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Karilea, this is so sad. I hope you are alright. I have experienced this feeling myself. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
beautifully sad Karilea  |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Karilea... so sad, but wonderfully penned by you ... RDB |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
An all too common tale. Well put. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Could have sworn I replied to this yesterday when I read it....sigh.... how forgetful I am getting to be! Nicely done, and ohhhh soooo sad. Hugs. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Another Karilea keeper for my library! Wonderful. hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. Carl Sandburg |
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Dakota Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 125New York |
How much life we never see, when we keep our eyes closed. Wonderful write! Dakota |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
SIL, how true this often is....a story told well. I have to go along with Sy in wishing that all your wishes/dreams come true! (I've been missing you...and this place.) ....jo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And when the day came that time was on his hands he rushed home to greet her And finds he should have made her a priority. Superb storytelling, Sunshiney One! *S* |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
My dear friend, this was such a great write and one that most could relate to, happiness is so important through our daily lives, onces inner peace can go missing for years, till again we go searching. Have a wonderful day and take care. Sincerely Rick |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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