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miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

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0 posted 2007-04-28 08:28 AM

Wisped by breath
the line swayed from pole to pole,
Cresting inner waves.

        Tidal had been the voice.
         Pulsating,
           Rippling.
         Now, a whisper, an echo.

Tidal voice
Passed among the lines.

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

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1 posted 2007-04-28 08:38 AM

I like the poem, but the formatting is not the way I would like so I'll try to explain a way I think it would be more appealing.  When I clicked to center most of it, I could not change what I wanted to put at a margin.

I had planned to begin each beginning line of the second verse at the same margin.  (Then the third verse would be centered again.)   I think it would have been probably a bit better paced.

Anyway, thanks for reading it as it is...

             miscellanea

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2007-04-28 09:33 AM

I'm so sorry you suffered formatting woes with this... for you're right. *S* I liked it very much before reading your comment... but with that in mind, I read it again... and heard the tidal voice, lapping at my mind, enhancing the words. *S*

Excellent work!!!

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

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3 posted 2007-04-28 02:02 PM

suthern,

You too kind, Lady! Thanks for doing a double-take on it, and giving me the feedback. It's such a pleasure to hear from you again. I hope things are well with you.

hugs,

miscellanea

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

4 posted 2007-05-11 07:55 AM

Cathy - nice voices to listen to yours giving us the tidal - Paul

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

5 posted 2007-05-11 08:38 AM

I like the ebb and flow of your poetic voice.

Linda

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2007-05-12 04:25 AM

MisC...I agree with suthern's comment. I read it again after your comment, and that makes it! *hugs*...jo

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

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The Southwest

7 posted 2007-05-12 11:32 PM

misc'
I can see what you mean
yet it reads beautifully

I hear the tide

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

8 posted 2007-05-19 05:11 AM

A beautiful read

from a beautiful soul.

Hey you... its good to read you.
Have a comp for a couple days so I thought I'd stop in. Be well.

~alyssa

Hupomeno.

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