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Loves Return |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! 
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Loves return! During dusk’s most plaintive song, when evening falls.... with the sting of alluring indifference, a relentless moon beats out the truth and pain of fleeting love, both cruel and unexplained!; and, as night succeeds the day, all hopes fail for wounded hearts in moments such as these, that even Time forgot.... shaken from the shattered glass of broken dreams; but, then at last...dawn’s chanticleer in staggering voice, sets the sunbeams spinning (through taffeta mists and trembling twilight) to weave a tapestry anew, of morning hopes for Love’s return! [This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (04-28-2007 09:19 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Reminded me of this one I wrote about 4 years ago I guess on here~~ In Quilted Cause Anchored to the feel of you, waging war inside this heart, I dream you in the myst of time, scrambling words that seam apart. The tapestry of silent still, an always love, that gathers white pieced in hand where stitches hold and carry warmth through dreams in night. Sewing still, with knotted ends controlling rich and complex, weaved. Ins and outs, the meshing feel the absence of, the preconceived. As you wish, the world goes on looking out the window, pained. Love beyond the reach of touch becomes the melody unchained. Through the looking glass, she stares seeing more than eyes need share. "Truth or Dare" behind the walls, silence reigns in quilted cause. M |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
wonderful writing. life, light, sun, moon shall all turn around love....for love tourtures them all. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Secondhanddreampoet, This is very nice. The only thing I would change is to put a strophe break at "But", and then make it simply "but". Bobby |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
 you write so wonderfully |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
That the cycle of hopelessness and hope - and the distinction between the two - can illicit such beauty, is perhaps the reason for it all. - Owl |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
Beautiful. I especially like "beats out the truth and pain of fleeting love, both cruel and unexplained!;" and "in staggering voice, sets the sunbeams spinning (through taffeta mists and trembling twilight) to weave a tapestry anew, of morning hopes for Love’s return!" |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
No wonder your from Pennsylvania...your a marvelous writer... this was beautiful and hopelessly romantic |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
secondhanddreampoet, It dances the dance of whimsy, enjoyed. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
To all the fine 'P.I.P.' poets who commented on this poem... thank you so much! If there is such a thing as a 'signature' piece or some semblance of a unique 'style' that one might aspire to reach....I suppose this 'write' comes as close as possible (to date) to whatever such elusive thing I may be chasing?! |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
You are very welcome, Bruce. Your work is a pleasure to read. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You truly do have the soul ~ and heart ~ of a poet. You also have the talent to eloquently express them, as well.   Linda |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
At dusk: "with the sting of alluring indifference" And then, "chanticleer" heralds a hopeful dawn: "(through taffeta mists and trembling twilight)" BRAVO! |
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