Torii - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2007-04-25 08:42 PM

.

I came upon a man
Seemingly standing sentinel
On what was beyond

I was tired
Too weary for fear

And all he said
As I passed him by
Was Oh
It’s you

.

TerryW
Senior Member

since 2000-03-23

Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA

1 posted 2007-04-25 10:10 PM

Every poem I have read by you is incredible. You have a unique gift for being wonderfully insightful, even within mundane circumstances.

I bow to your genius!

Keep 'em coming ... I need to be made to think!

~Terry

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

2 posted 2007-04-26 01:02 AM

Oh, it’s you, Young fellow!
Where is she?
That very elegant young lady!
Who was in your hand last year,
When you eagerly took her to flee.

Her blue eyes were clearer than sky,
Her golden hairs shined moonlight
Her cousin the girl I loved so much
Said nothing good about you.

But she was sadly dead last year
I wrote 1000 poems for her with tear
I painted her portrait named Blue
Which was stolen at art show on day 2.

So, where is she? My lover's cousin.
I am asking you, young fellow!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2007-04-26 06:35 AM

offering purification
transitioning from a marvelous
spiritual world into the profane world
because that is how things are...

marvelous write John

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

4 posted 2007-04-28 01:23 AM

I am riveted by the simple beauty of your poem.

Thank you.
A

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

5 posted 2007-04-28 02:02 PM

A fine lesson in what I call
"Minimalistic Constructionalism"!

This "open" forum is quite possibly becoming REALLY
(especially) 'interesting' lately!

carter07
Junior Member

since 2007-04-26

Posts 31

6 posted 2007-04-28 02:07 PM

I love that you keep it simple but it still says a lot and has a point. Very proficient.

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

7 posted 2007-04-28 03:33 PM

Love it like always!!

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.