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Culloden
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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As dusk slips across the windy moor The sounds of battle shiver through my bones Was that the cry of a night bird taking flight Or the groan of a clansman falling, Reaching for his comrades Knowing none would reach home again? Were his thoughts of the lass he’d left Or the pain of his breath leaving; Did he taste his blood or just futility? Does he know I walk this spongy ground Shedding tears for him? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Did he taste his blood or just futility? Does he know I walk this spongy ground Shedding tears for him?" Unanswerable questions, layered with pain. Good to read you again, lady! |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
wow. beautiful. very touching. very soooo good. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. It was as stupid as a Japanese Banzai into guns at point blank range. Some never grow up or get the chance. Let's at least hope they were, (as often were in the Pacific), drunk at the time. John . [This message has been edited by Huan Yi (04-16-2007 04:50 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern Your reads always affect me.  |
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Andrew Sewell Junior Member
since 2007-04-16
Posts 24County Durham, England |
A great read, thanks for sharing.  Andrew "Writing is not necessarily something to be ashamed of, but do it in private and wash your hands afterwards." - R.A. Heinlein. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
It is so nice to see the poetry from the UK finally making it's way into the light. This has its voice but mingled with that are the memories we share of that proud, green land. a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA |
Excellent treatment of one of my favorite themes. It made me go back and dig out my own effort from a few years back. Great write. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Suthern, a beautiful, well written poem. Thank you. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"As dusk slips across the windy moor The sounds of battle shiver through my bones" such poignant work with special meaning for me tonight thank you |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Belle, or should I say lassie! ~ Stand up and take a bow for this rousing write! Superbly written! You may not post often, but when you do, you do it with panache!  Linda |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SuthernGal~ I felt a kinship with the beauty of this penning~ It has such a feel of reverance ... you do the memories proud~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Did he taste his blood or just futility? Does he know I walk this spongy ground sometimes, painful and cruel as it may seem, there are no answers to questions.... so so nice to read you again...I've missed you |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
omg Suthern.....you do know how incredible this is don't you? This reminds me of a long ago poet writing as he views this scene.... Kudos lady.  May I just say again....WOW!! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
This is just outstanding, suthern! (One of my favorites, for sure! It's so good to grab a moment again and to see your name by this excellent poem. miscellanea |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
when tears fall...wow...your words are just so powerful, the emotions so real... have missed you lady |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sounds like the prelude to a novel here....more, more! *hugs*....jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Agreeing with iliana here...one of your best. When I used to visit old battlefields and forts, I would just go off into a trance of sorts, and at times I felt like I was warping through time. This had that same effect. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Excellent emotive 'write'....in addition to its 'universal'/timeless commentary on the sad futility of all war; etc.....for me personally, it evoked fine memories of my most recent visit (this past Sept.) to Scotland (my first and foremost 'love'!) MUCH applause! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, yes he does! Thank you for the moment. In agreement, with Jo and Karen, most decidedly one of your best! - Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Midnitesun: It's good to be here... thank you so much! *S* Drauntz: You've given my afternoon such a smile... thank you! *S* Huan Yi: Long before the term came into use, men were cannon fodder... for God, for glory... for country, for cause. Thank you! *S* Seymour: You are so dear... thank you very much! *S* Andrew: And thank you for reading! *S* Kethry: I'll admit it... Scotland seeped its way right into my soul... and will probably flavor my poetry for years to come... if I can ever find the words to do it justice. *S* But with all that love for the land... my best memories are those of loving friends... Thank you... for then, for now... for always. *S* Gunslinger: Thank you so much - I loved your poem and am so glad you reposted it! *S* Sunshine: Thank YOU, sweet lady... very much! *S* Lady: I'm so glad it touched you... thank you very much! *S* EA: Thank you, my friend. *S* It's hard for me to be here much... but you always make me feel so welcome. *S* And yes... lassie it is. *S* Just before visiting Culloden, I'd walked through a churchyard where so many of the names were familiar... even if they'd lived long before the ones I knew who shared that name. Maybe that's why I felt so welcomed there... so at home. *S* Marge: You don't know how much your words mean to me... I think fear of giving the memories less than they deserve had kept my pen from pouring out words... thank you!!! Lee: I've missed you, too, dear lady... And you're right... sometimes, there are no answers... just questions. *S* GS: You truly humble me... that's what I was striving for... unsure whether I'd managed or not. *S* Thank you so much!! miscellanea: It's good to be here, however short the time... and particularly special to read your kind words... Thank you! *S* luminosity: I've missed me, too, my friend... Need I say more? *S* But I have missed you... and so glad you liked this... thank you!! iliana: If you hadn't made me laugh, my head would be too swollen to get through the door. *G* Thank you so very much!! serenity: I suspect we'd be great companions at battlefields... though we might need someone to drag us out of our trance and home. *S* Thank you so very much! *S* secondhanddreampoet: I know you fell in love with Scotland, too... so I thank you most sincerely for liking this! *S* Owl: Thank you so much, dear lady... I really appreciate your kindness! *S* |
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paullallady Member
since 2007-04-03
Posts 262Michigan |
this is so hauntingly beautiful and sad. |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
Thank you for this. So touching. |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
BRAVO!!!!BRAVO!!!!...I could feel the dampness of the mist on the moors...A wonderful write that touches the inner soul of this Irish Lady....Well done...*Big Hugs* |
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sweetpoetess Member
since 2005-02-27
Posts 428Florida |
Such a mind blowing piece. It had so many sad parts. It reminds me of the movie "Braveheart". So beautiful this is. Awesome poem!!! Poetry is beauty in words. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
paullalady, Tina, Startime and sweetpoetess: Thank you... each one of you... so very much! I can't tell you how much your kind comments mean to me... but I'm so grateful. *S* |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my, Ruth ... this was truly a powerful piece. Your contrast between tasting blood or futility hit very hard. Wonderful writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Kit: I am so remiss... but however tardy, my thank you is sincere. *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bears a  right back to the top ... it does !!*HUGLETS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is how I would like to write. Splendid, dear suthern lady. xoxoxo A |
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