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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. It’s strange to find you here Now on the beach given how much You dislike the water How loud your rancor Claiming this part of the world Again under rules That no one else but you Would know Your friend sits on the sand Seemingly stunned by your words This is not exactly in a date What he bargained for How good the waves feel Washing against my knees With all their freedom And striding masculinity So much like a man being alive I leave the land with you behind Though I still can hear you call my name And in a different silence akin to joy Swim out to sea . |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Can't help it... I like the way your pictures come alive. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
John, your poems always have a special rhythm which is the ecoh of one's heart beat. This poem... there are three people in your poem. One is "You"/Anna. One is "her friend"/"He", then there is "I". "I" am laughing at the brainless "he" but why does "she" called out the name of "I" while "I" totally ignored "her" and swim off to sea? Are they tri-sillies? It is a beautiful poem and I enjoy as always. [This message has been edited by Drauntz (04-16-2007 12:57 AM).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
i like this softer side of you |
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Andrew Sewell Junior Member
since 2007-04-16
Posts 24County Durham, England |
A wonderful read Huan Yi, the imagery really came to life as I read on. Thanks for sharing. Andrew "Writing is not necessarily something to be ashamed of, but do it in private and wash your hands afterwards." - R.A. Heinlein. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
John I love your poetry -Juju |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Juju, Always glad to hear that Thank you John |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
This fit my mood this weekend~~ enjoyed,  M |
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Rottiestyl Member
since 2007-04-19
Posts 60Illinois, USA |
Great piece, smooth and airy. |
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