Open Poetry #40 |
On Angel's Wings |
Devious Intellectual Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 112 |
Pen strokes carefully massage their way into life It's magic in the conscience of the audience Intimacy with a loved craft; my true first wife Jointly, with pure nature like Guaraní descents Revolutionary attempts to transcend thought Saw the pinnacle but couldn't pry heavens doors By most happiness is sought but she had me caught The secret; finding contentness amongst downpours Translate human's most misunderstood; emotion Through a pen liberate your soul; let freedom ring Now breathe, find pure silence amongst the commotion Separate from the world and sour on angel’s wings Poetry is my Escape Devious |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Absolutely beautiful and highly enjoyed! I am the one who keeps her feet firmly in the air, I understand. Of course every now and then I hit the ground ... but on Angel's wings I soar again. Love, Margherita |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
”Poetry is my Escape” ! -mine too!!! most fine 'wordsmithing!...much applause!!...however: from my ever-most-humble perspective, I would just like to mention the following: minor question?!: is it ‘contentedness’ rather than ‘contentness’?! minor point: personally, I wish most any phrase other than “let freedom ring” was used in this wonderful ‘write’! P.S. : You are one of several persons who I just must say chose a grand-fine “P.I.P.”-world ID (“UserName”)! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"Now breathe, find pure silence amongst the commotion" Yes - that and poetry works wonders! |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
"Separate from the world and sour on angel’s wings" Yes...soar high on angel's wings. You have done it beautifully and rather intellectually. Thank you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Devious Intellectual Enjoyed the read. |
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Devious Intellectual Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 112 |
thanks for all the feedback especially the criticism you are right ill make some changes thanks |
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