Open Poetry #40 |
As the Firelight Dies |
Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Kethry challenged me to write a sestina. She should probably have known better. Judge for itself. What it lacks in consistent meter it makes up for in incomprehensibility. As the Firelight Dies Clip the yarn and toss a coin- rings like song in a pilgrim’s tale. Watch it spin: gold so rare, like burnished tears. Rare, like scarlet yarn: watch it spin. Drop a coin, I’ll tell a tale and sing a weaver’s song, a griever’s song, a bird of rare and varied plume. A tale, a yarn, worth a coin. Watch it spin, watch it spin, and sing a reaver’s song. A rover’s coin from faraway, and precious rare. Tie up the yarn with the tale, the crimson tale, watch it spin. Die the yarn to suit the song, scarlet, rare, like a coin that’s spent for love. A coin from pirate’s treasure tale, like virgin blood, warm and rare. Watch it spin. An old rogue’s song, a sailor’s tale. It’s rare, the coin that buys a yarn, a weaver’s tale: Watch it spin a reaver’s song. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
make sense and still make sense. a pleasure both to mind and eyes. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Nan, I still say you do sestinas with style and without the grind the ties them to the ground. I like the rewrite very mauch. It has a lovely flow and sings to me. a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Thanks, friends. You make me smile. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Only two reads is not enough to share the magic of this spiniing tale, so BTTT. a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
you have spun a fine weave and I have enjoyed your spinning I agree with Kethry BTTT |
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