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Will You Wait for Me?
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Will You Wait for Me? |
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tatalinia Member
since 2005-12-17
Posts 137CA, US 
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My love is real for you, its complete No doubt that what I feel is real But ready for what I feel Iam not It has scared me and driven me away But please can you wait for me? Let me grow just a little older Become a little smarter a little bolder Im sorry I can't be there for you now I will drive you away with my insecurities Scare you away with my tears My life is in shambles and I have nothing I do not deserve you I refuse to have my hand out I cannot ask for anything more My tears are going to dry up And Im going to find my way out of here I will leave you but have no doubt I will come back "I promise" Only this time not with my hand out My love will be stronger My heart will be open My fears will be gone and I will love you I will see you in the meadow On a warm sunny day I will wear that dress you love And hold a lily in my hand I will open my heart up to you And never look back I do not need shine or wealth, just a pen and some paper for my health [This message has been edited by tatalinia (04-09-2007 06:29 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this is very beautiful Tatalinia.. I would only change the know doubt in the 2nd line and in this line "I will leave you but have know doubt" to no doubt if that is what you meant... otherwise I think it is "perfection" M |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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tatalinia Member
since 2005-12-17
Posts 137CA, US |
thank you for the comments on my poem. I do not need shine or wealth, just a pen and some paper for my health |
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Jenna Member
since 2007-03-20
Posts 180 |
I really enjoyed this, particularly your closing verse. It gave me goosebumps |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know I sure wouldn't be ready for those feelings....so this would be my plea also I can relate good to read you again Althia |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: With such a beautiful promise, he might wait for you, yes! Love, Margherita |
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