»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #40
»
Felix and Sally Get Lent Out
| Open Poetry #40 |
|
Felix and Sally Get Lent Out |
|
|
Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA 
|
The people that are paid to care for Felix and Sally have lots of friends with great big houses that sometimes get dirty, and need a real good cleaning. Being generous to a fault, the family is very willing to share Felix and Sally with these friends. They rather pass the kids around from house to house. Felix and Sally always sit in the back seats of the limousines. They’re not uppity that way. All Felix and Sally do is work all day. It’s all pretty much the same with them. Felix and Sally don’t ask for much. They better not. Of course, the family’s affluent friends like it that way. It’s free slave labor, right here in the land of the free and the home of the brave. Now is that a deal or what? Bobby [This message has been edited by Robert Jordan (04-08-2007 08:17 PM).] |
||
| © Copyright 2007 Robert E. Jordan - All Rights Reserved | |||
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
~sigh~ Yes...the land of the "FREE" You have again exposed an ugly truth of the land of the FREE, where some are freer than others, where most look the other way because they don't want to have to acknowledge something that makes them uncomfortable.  Heaven forbid someone with money and status should be made to feel uncomfortable!!! Heaven forbid the 'workers' should prefer to be treated with dignity! |
||
|
Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Midnitesun, Thanks for the kind words on this poem. I'm pleased that it worked for you. Bobby |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Robert, your message gets through, but I was stopped at the beginning, by thinking that Sally had a number of friends with dirty houses... As you went on, I saw that both Felix and Sally were put to work. You might want to work on that first paragraph just a little... but I certainly admired the work of the poem, and felt a regard for Felix and Sally that I did not have before opening your poem. Good job, Sir. |
||
|
Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Sunshine, Thanks for the kind words on this one. I've made a change to the first strophe that may make it clearer. Felix and Sally are foster children. Bobby |
||
Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know sometimes taking these children temporarily from a situation they know to one they don't know does more damage than the K.I.S.S. method. We found in working with placing children that were abused that they suffered severe trauma if not placed in a similar but safe environment, rather than one of affluence. Loved the message - and I wish this actually didn't have to even be a subject to be written about. |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, that did it...and very well, too.  |
||
|
Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I had read your poem in the core of the night and it ached and now in the day light it still aches ... You added the "get lent out" I see and made it clear what happened. It is sad, extremely sad. And while such situations were "normal" in former times in Europe too, now such dramatic abuse can still be found throughout the world. May humanity grow in awareness and respect children's rights. Thank you for your powerful write. Love, Margherita |
||
|
Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Mysteria, Thanks for your kind words. A friend from long ago inspired this poem. He was a foster child, and was always being moved around. They moved him one year to a farm. As he was a city boy, he didn’t do well there. At last, they moved him back into town. Sadly, his new foster parents let him drive their car. They were good to him. He died when he was seventeen when he crashed the car into a tree. Sunshine, Thanks for the kind words. I’m pleased it worked for you. Margherita, Thanks for your kind words, and the information. I’m glad it got to you. Bobby |
||
|
secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
much applause! This (and other) 'writes' by Mr. Jordan are (in my ever-most-humble opinion) grand-fine examples of 'Realism' and specifically, what I call 'social-impact' (conscience) poesy! I dearly hope MANY more folks pay clear attention to these 'important' poems [than did my 'Runaway American Dream' (and other such 'writes') in 'open' forum # 39; etc!] |
||
|
Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Secondhanddreampoet, Thanks for the kind words on this poem. Felix and I both appreciate your thoughts. Where is "open forum #39? What part of Pennsylvania are you from? Bobby |
||
|
Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Given the thought that your readers have put into replying to this moving poem of great import, surely illustrates the merit of this moving write. Your poetry strikes a resonant chord with their collective social consciousness. God bless you for shedding Light where there is Darkness.  Love & God's Light, EA |
||
|
Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
This is a good mood poem John |
||
|
Robert Jordan Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 392Philadelphia Pa USA |
Earth Angel, Thanks for your kindness. Huan Yi, Thanks for liking the poem. I appreciate your comments. Bobby |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
