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passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

0 posted 2007-04-06 11:23 PM

I can't see the end to this...
the waking up hours before the alarm,
the nightmares and tossing around,
the feeling that you'll do me harm.

We always hurt the ones we love the most.

Maybe it's just stress,
maybe you're a ghost.

There are nights I miss you
terribly.
The years stack up against each other
side by side comparably.

I light my candle and burn my oil,
and still wait for you to call
between sips of rum and coke
and the glory of it all
in a room filled with smoke
I am restless and small,
preparing myself again
once again for the fall.

Whatever happens tomorrow
...just know
I still love you
as I did years ago.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2007-04-06 11:32 PM

...and unfortunately it never changes, or goes away...but we cope, move along, lie to ourselves.

Forty-some years ago, another life, another world, the memories, the feelings still there, not replaced by, or substituted for, but living with the new (30 some years) and current ones.

We move on when we're ready . . . some just take longer to know they are.

Heartbeats from me to you, dear friend. . .

j.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

2 posted 2007-04-06 11:33 PM

There are some especially powerful parts to this 'write'!

I particularly like:

"The years stack up against each other..."

and:

"I light my candle and burn my oil
and still wait for you to call
between sips of rum and coke..."

the following rather effectively delimits
my (alleged) 'life' as well:

"in a room filled with smoke
I am restless and small,
preparing myself again
once again for the fall."

I don't write such (grand) direct 'realism'
[though I wish I could and had!] as I might
not likely survive doing so!....

Applause!!

TerryW
Senior Member

since 2000-03-23

Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA

3 posted 2007-04-07 01:16 AM

Beautiful, as always! I know the feelings well, myself. I have been through the hurt, and still crave those few good times in between. You have struck home here, dear girl!

~~Terry

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2007-04-07 01:45 AM

"There are nights I miss you
terribly.
The years stack up against each other
side by side comparably.

I light my candle and burn my oil,
and still wait for you to call"

ahha...yes, I know this too...

exceptional write Dixie!

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

5 posted 2007-04-07 02:17 AM

"I light my candle and burn my oil,
and still wait for you to call"
me too love this.
why call him first?

enjoyed as always

Jenna
Member

since 2007-03-20

Posts 180

6 posted 2007-04-07 05:36 AM

This bought tears to my eyes. I can really relate to your first and last verses.
A beautiful write

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2007-04-07 05:27 PM

probably just stress, Dixie...

ease up on yourself

M

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

8 posted 2007-04-07 05:34 PM

My heart bleeds for you....Your words did much to share your pain...I pray in the sharing there comes relief.....**BIG BIG HUGS**

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

9 posted 2007-04-07 07:59 PM

I hear your heart here Dixie

excellent work

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