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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. It never was A happy house To begin with For all the noise Those numerous cars Parked along the fenced in yard The windows always seemed To mutely brood on what they knew Trees still cast shadows On the lawn The street yet more A lane inside a cave And now no young girl Comes running out the door anymore Holding her coat closed against the cold Dim moonlight in her hair Or lips to lips in merged embrace Holds the love that is her fragile heart By the frame garage . |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
John~ I felt a tugging at my heartstrings at the memories this one brought to the surface~ Exquisitely poignant~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
enjoyed. I see what you see but might feel differently. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I drive by old places in my old neighborhood and replay memories funny how we do that a lane inside a cave...I have a street here like that...it's beautiful, it is |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
John, for some unknown reason I feel your poetry is wasted on us when it should be in print. You are a voice one hears at readings especially in April. When I read your poetry I wonder why with all the meanings of yes, well, and of course |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I'm glad it's "in print" here - though I do agree in essence with Sunshine. If it was anyplace but here, I may not have see it, nor would I have been moved by it as I am... very well written/expressed, my friend. j. |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
agree with above. Your poem made me pity myself deeply...heaven does not give me the gift. But I am very glad that I have the chance to read yours. |
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Ella Blue Junior Member
since 2006-05-26
Posts 47 |
There is a film called "Scent of Green Papaya", which is my favorite...almost completely done without speaking, using music... Your poetry makes me feel the same way as this film; like holding my breath. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thank you all And Sunshine you're wrong The stuff I write is not in fashion and frankly I don't care. If a few here find something in them that is enough as both a surprise and a pleasure. Thanks again John |
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