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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2007-03-29 08:57 PM

Where have you gone,
so deeply, madly, without me?

Summer is coming,
and like time in a basket
I swing from your hand,
covered with monk cloth.

I have touched your variegated mind
with my rich and wild yearning,
then tried contentment as a bridge
over the loud voice of my river.

But still my threads weave
with the abandon of a wild rose,
over the steadfast tree
into the copse.

I touch your tender back
with my eyes only,
so you will not turn around
and lose your focus.

Tight, this mouth;
the heartbeat weaving of my breast to you,
knowing how your lips would feel
as your tongue pried me open
and parted my vagrant heart
with your hard truth.

Instead,
I watch you go,
deeply, madly, without me.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2007-03-29 08:58 PM

I was going to say something wonderful...

and all that came out was

WOW!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2007-03-29 10:07 PM

EXQUISITE!!!

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart..
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul.

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2007-03-30 12:37 PM

I was going to say something too Martie
but there is nothing fitting

only silence

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2007-03-31 10:59 AM

quote:

I have touched your variegated mind
with my rich and wild yearning,
then tried contentment as a bridge
over the loud voice of my river.

Martie!!!! Gosh, are you aware of being an extraordinary POETESS.

Your words are so intensely beautiful, that tears swelled in my eyes.

Love and hugs and bows!
Margherita

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2007-03-31 01:35 PM

MartieSis~
Layer upon layer of love ...~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

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displaced

6 posted 2007-03-31 05:09 PM

now this sets a poetic mood for me

maybe I will write another tonight, very inspiring and touching

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2007-03-31 07:50 PM

Nice writing...James

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2007-03-31 07:58 PM

and this is why you are my queen of poetry

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

9 posted 2007-04-01 12:27 PM

Martie, this is luscious and passionate....that's a very hot combination!

....jo

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

10 posted 2007-04-01 03:36 PM

Amazing write, Martie. Here's my 'WOW' and a bump back up to the top.

unholyjudgement
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since 2007-02-27

Posts 116
Wherever my soul takes me next

11 posted 2007-04-02 12:00 PM

I can simply utter WOW

My mind is like lightning
One brilliant flash and its gone

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

12 posted 2007-04-02 12:08 PM

I really LOVE some of these lines and images,

for example:

“time in a basket”

“I have touched your variegated mind
with my rich and wild yearning”

“my threads weave
with the abandon of a wild rose”

v. fine!!

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

13 posted 2007-04-02 12:16 PM

You sing in beautiful heart songs.

Wonderful read.

Devious Intellectual
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since 2006-05-08

Posts 112

14 posted 2007-04-02 02:19 AM

I touch your tender back
with my eyes only,
so you will not turn around
and lose your focus.

liked that and how it ended, bring back some lost emotion i had, guess thats good and bad

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

15 posted 2007-04-02 10:36 PM

Wow is right....oh boy....is it ever....
Nicely done dear one....

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

16 posted 2007-04-06 03:31 PM

what you see and what you hear and imagine comes out so wonderfully when you write it - this is terrific - Paul

paullallady
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since 2007-04-03

Posts 262
Michigan

17 posted 2007-04-06 03:52 PM

beautiful, just amazingly beautiful

SEA

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Posts 22676
with you

18 posted 2007-04-06 05:13 PM

I'll just echo everyone else...

this is amazing Martie...and touches deep.

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

19 posted 2007-04-06 08:49 PM

Gosh, Martie, the depth you have with words is amazing....

jimmy

Mysteria

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British Columbia, Canada

20 posted 2007-04-08 12:18 PM

Startime55
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Alberta, Canada

21 posted 2007-04-08 02:14 PM

Stunningly Beautiful...*Big Hugs*

Goldenrose
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22 posted 2007-04-08 07:26 PM

Brilliant and beautiful, your words are chosen like plucking apples from a tree, each one succulent and juicy with meaning..thank you Martie..

Goldenrose.

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

23 posted 2007-04-10 09:32 AM

your internal rhymes and countless visuals keep the reader high stepping through a palpable sense of life and it's grandeur.
Terrific write....filled with passion

I have touched your variegated mind
with my rich and wild yearning,
then tried contentment as a bridge
over the loud voice of my river.

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