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Ratleader

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0 posted 2007-03-28 10:07 PM

Drag

Don’t let it fool you;
Poetry is prose in drag.
It creates its own senses,
own sensibilities, yearnings,
lipsticking passion in careful dabs
that finally slide into bold smears
red race cars could have left;
and oh the gentle curves it blends
around those varicolor eyes,
hoping to disguise a cheekbone here,
a flaring Adam’s apple there,
lapsed into a too little too dark smudge
beside the nose, and spoiled by one fleck
flutter-blinked off a blue mascara lash.
Its voice comes desperate falsetto
over the simpering turn
of a wrist to show the gloss
of painted nails and sparkle rings,
the fingers playing somehow tense,
the skirt too short but at least
the legs are shaved and tauped,
the choice of heels naturally sensible
in case it needs to flee.
Don’t let her fool you.

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Tongue-in-cheek of course.....by a guy who only writes poetry, not prose!

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (03-29-2007 10:57 AM).]

Drauntz
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since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

1 posted 2007-03-28 10:25 PM

so much enjoyed. so true.
I thought that prose was asthma and poem was cough. both are rhythm of the breath.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

2 posted 2007-03-29 11:53 AM

I never thought of it that way. And you dabbed the cologne just where I like it, too.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2007-03-29 12:40 PM

RatMan~
In case you might not be aware ... this is brilliant !!!

Absolutely !!!

You often amaze me with the accuracy of your poetic self~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Martie

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4 posted 2007-03-29 01:28 PM

Wonderful imagery, Ed...sort of like that story I read recently. I turned the pages down at top, to read again. How about writing the other characters in this titillating poem/story? You can't just leave it there all hot and bothered, can you?

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2007-03-29 01:52 PM

and oh the gentle curves it blends
around those varicolor eyes,
hoping to disguise a cheekbone here,
a flaring Adam’s apple there,
lapsed into a too little too dark smudge
beside the nose, and spoiled by one fleck
flutter-blinked off a blue mascara lash.

LOL... You've just given me a stroll down Bourbon Street, late on the Saturday night before Mardi Gras. *G*

I love this... and agree with Marge... it's brilliant! *S*

Of course... you know that poetry's really the lady who speaks little but says much while prose is the flapper who can't stop yapping... right? LOL

Huan Yi
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Waukegan

6 posted 2007-03-29 04:59 PM

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icequeen
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since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

7 posted 2007-03-29 05:27 PM

I agree with Marge - BRILLIANT!! Oh yes I definitely adore your tongue-in-cheek style here!

Funny thing, I seem to love including references to lipstick in my poetry, so when I read this it made me think back to those years when I wrote poems that were actually good lol... and then saw Suthern's reply about Mardi Gras and cracked up!!

Great write, I love it

Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

dingusjr
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since 2003-09-24

Posts 415
Missouri

8 posted 2007-03-29 06:01 PM

Nice, Ed...I will have to use lipstick in my next poem. I have already made referrence to a training bra. haha

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2007-03-29 09:00 PM

Dang.

You done good, kid.

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

10 posted 2007-04-13 06:22 PM

You done dragged this one into the light - Couldn't help yourself could you - soon there will be no skeletons in your closet because they'd have all come out.

Keth

a good commitee can decimate communication.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

11 posted 2007-04-14 11:21 AM

...and your tongue is ever so cleverly ensconced in your poet's cheek!

Linda

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23

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On A Journey To The Unknown

12 posted 2007-04-14 12:28 PM

Wow! This is fantastic.

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

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The Southwest

13 posted 2007-04-14 10:08 PM

I know the word brilliant has been used
and yet
I am going to use it again

I love the way you put your tongue in your cheek

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

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Durban, South Africa

14 posted 2007-04-15 10:30 AM

Much enjoyed.

- Owl

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