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CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2007-03-15 11:39 AM

The scent of your hair gently wafts my way -
You are close - yet so infinitely far!
Your image in my mind is night and day,
But how to reach and touch a distant star?
The heart is aching, but the mind is weak
And all the space between us is my cell -
To only lift my hand and touch your cheek!
- Is but a dream to dream and within dwell.
Is there love, waiting hidden 'neath the veil
Of distant air? Is the chill of your glance
But a rampart around your soul, the mail
To guard your heart against my only chance?
Oh, you said yes once, but I was a fool,
My tears now at your feet a crystal pool.

CG

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2007-03-15 11:57 AM

romantically poetic, capturing the utter ache for another close to chest...iin the now world of shadows...yup, yup, yup, this was a dandy...very well done

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2007-03-15 12:29 PM

CG~
You ink a gentle poignancy in this piece~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

3 posted 2007-03-15 10:02 PM

"Oh, you said yes once, but I was a fool,
My tears now at your feet a crystal pool."

to reach for a star
the best part of life CG

this is a beauty

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

4 posted 2007-03-18 10:33 AM

"My tears now at your feet a crystal pool." <----great line

Loneliness expressed gracefully, good write.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

jak
Member

since 2007-03-14

Posts 85
Charlotte, NC

5 posted 2007-03-18 10:44 AM

nice. it feels like it has age (in a good way).

Jak
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A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

6 posted 2007-03-20 07:33 AM

Very Touching!

~ARH

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

7 posted 2007-03-20 07:37 AM

This is grand indeed and reminds me of a situation in my life right now...fits it to a tee now I must print it of course and send it away in snail mail lest ye master send the castle guards after me!!!! LOL

~~~kingsangel~~~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2007-03-20 02:45 PM

a beautiful piece indeed

CastleGuard
Senior Member

since 2003-04-30

Posts 760
Alberta, Canada

9 posted 2007-03-21 11:40 AM

LeeJ - thank you for the kind words.

Marge - I'll take poignancy any time...thank you.

Kate - thank you "to reach for the star...." it best be ones ladder be firmly secured...

Janette - thank you.

jak - thank you...it seems my age is becoming my greatest asset....LOL.

ARH - to touch inside is the hope and the intent...thank you.

Angel4aKing - send away! castle guards have been ordered to remain at their posts....LOL....and thank you.

passing shadows - thank you.

CG

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