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Champagne Rose |
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Jeremy Redinger Junior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 46 |
The Champagne Rose A dream in a crystal glass This moment in pearls of time so thin Nobody notices they're there Or wonders where they've gone. The eyes, It's always been there - That green tinge, a lake of soul So deep, So pure, I beg to drown within... Tear back, But not to break, Cling within the limelight, Of that cool, refreshing drink. Catch her lips, Crimson divine, Sip my martini Red lips of wine. Can you taste the sight Or swallow the sound, Would you eat the starlight If no one's around? Cherry wine, Strawberry rhyme, Vintage of time Taste a lime... Tequila Tha killa Thai villa Vanilla... Wrapped in a pool of milk, The moor of buttery cream White blankets of silk Taste the delight of a dream. The dream in a crystal glass, Pearls of time gone so fast, A moment they're there, And in a word they're... gone. All that's left is an empty glass, And the scent... Of a champagne rose. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Can you taste the sight Or swallow the sound, Would you eat the starlight If no one's around? neat write here |
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Nexis_Rose New Member
since 2007-03-14
Posts 7Arkansas, USA |
great poem! I'll be looking for your other submissions. "Our physical bodies are merely temporary hosts for our everlasting souls." |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
All that's left is an empty glass, And the scent... Of a champagne rose. extraordinarily compelling with an erie effect....supurb writing |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
This is fabulous and deserves a *bump* back to the top! Very sensual and I love how you use your words. Cherry wine, Strawberry rhyme, Vintage of time Taste a lime... great stuff here! Caroline He who wants a rose must respect the thorn. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
NIce...James |
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Jeremy Redinger Junior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 46 |
Thank you all for your wonderful responses! They mean a lot to me  It's been a long time since I've written anything. Get caught up in the curly weave of life and lose track of things I really enjoy. It's a good feeling to write again.If anyone is curious, this entire poem is a metaphor of sorts. The rose is a man's heart that dares to entice a woman, and the champagne (and various other types of alcohol mentioned) represents the intoxicating nature of a the man's character, personality, and spirit. One might consider it a poem describing the dance of emotions a man such as Don Juan or Romeo might experience while seducing the woman they desire. It does go a bit deeper than that, to be fair - but in a way that should never be explained, only artistically understood at the emotional level. Anyway, thanks again! I hope I haven't bored or scared anyone away from my poetry  All the best to each of you, Jeremy x |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"This moment in pearls of time so thin" <----great line here! "Would you eat the starlight <---love this visual If no one's around?" I adored this piece and enjoyed your expanded explanation, "only artistically understood at the emotional level." Well, all I can say is I liked reading this from a readers level and was not bored one bit. *wink wink* always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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