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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

0 posted 2007-03-12 02:19 PM

See me.
       All of me.
Not just the outside,
but what lies within.
Descry intricacy of thought
mixed with contrast of heart;

the ups and downs
highs and lows,
laughter and tears
joys and woes.

Completely composed
in a package
of imperfect,
I am one
of many parts;

a vital composition
that truly starts
past the surface
under the skin
       the core of my soul
        is where I begin.

I may not always
think like you
or see things from
your point of view,

still,         I see
with open mind;
look much deeper
so that you might find

       me, the all of me.

I am not so different
from you,     or you.
I'll never be perfect
and that's the truth;

I feel love
and I feel pain,
and I have stood
in   God's   healing   rain.

I am, who I am
in all of my    complexity,
and I shall never want     for more
than for you to see    me.

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

1 posted 2007-03-12 02:47 PM

Yes, you are simply complex . . . as you've shown so beautifully in this poem.

H, Robert

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2007-03-12 03:09 PM

So expertly penned m'friend.
Love this Donna.
Hugs~Nancy

P.S. Wanna buy a pair of slightly used funny red shoes?

~ Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me. ~

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

3 posted 2007-03-13 02:03 AM

I am so glad that you are among us in all your package of imperfect ...

Completely composed
in a package
of imperfect,
I am one
of many parts

I like this all so much - and I like that you are you.

A

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2007-03-13 05:21 AM

Hiding in plain sight works for me, too.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2007-03-13 06:43 AM

people are so rushed these days they hardly ever take the time to see what's right in front of their faces

beautiful write

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2007-03-13 02:38 PM

Donna...

to find the stars resort within
my very own majesty’s imperfect perfect

Touch to screen

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

7 posted 2007-03-15 01:51 PM

"I feel love
and I feel pain,
and I have stood
in   God's   healing   rain.

and I shall never want     for more
than for you to see    me."

Wow.

In the late 60's or early 70's
I would be saying Groovy and cool.
Great write.  Love the emotion.

JL

Thomas, because thou hast seen me, thou hast believed:
blessed are they that have not seen, and yet have believed.
~Jesus Christ

icequeen
Senior Member

since 2001-12-09

Posts 633
FL USA

8 posted 2007-03-15 02:56 PM

I am not so different
from you, or you.
I'll never be perfect
and that's the truth

You have laid out the complex with a simplicity that allows one to see that many things are not the unknown after all, and that "different" is often non-existant.
I do like this very much

Caroline

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

Janette

Member Elite

since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

9 posted 2007-03-15 04:01 PM

I see.

And I do so like what I read and see of you.

Enjoyed this shared piece of YOU.

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

10 posted 2007-03-15 09:44 PM

"Completely composed
in a package
of imperfect"

which is what makes you absolutely perfect
gentle Donna

you have caught me up here...

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