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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Water falls In dancing droplets Scarring mountain’s face With its path I touch my face Where rivulets of tears Have left their mark Prettiness was never mine But I saw a sort of beauty When I looked at me Through your eyes Now, my own find nothing But pain-scored furrows On barren landscape No scenic lookout here |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
 this is touching. you phrase it in such a way that I think even those who have never been there are transported to this place. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
suthern gal, you are as pretty as any sunset or sunrise over the ocean that I've seen in my lifetime |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Suthern, this is so touching. How amazing of you to make that comparison. I actually felt a thump in my chest, (heart?) . "I touch my face Where rivulets of tears have left their mark" Oh my dear, no tear could cause the deep scaring you are comparing. You have beauty of face, and beauty of heart, enough to last a lifetime. I well remember you and all you write tells me, you are short changing yourself. No one has the power to scar anyone as beautiful a person as you. Always remember it is their loss, not yours. You are worthy. Sincerely martyjo |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"But I saw a sort of beauty When I looked at me Through your eyes" oh my goodness you don't need someone else's eyes to see your beauty still... I like the poem |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Laura, you have the one singular beauty that surpasses all others -- the one that shines from within, and never fades. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern girl....I liked the analogy...but poem feels very sad. I've had days like that, too. Big hug to you.......jo |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved one, don’t you ever, ever say that you are not beautiful, I have pictures here in front of me that show just how beautiful you are. It is a true beauty, it will never fade, never die for it is a beauty that transcends mere physical and comes from your soul. Your Inner Light shines like a beacon. If I dared I would show everyone the pictures I have but a promise is a promise so I won’t. although everyone who comes through my door can see them and they all remark at how beautiful you are. And just in case anyone accuses me of having doctored or altered the photos I haven’t, they show the truth of you. Now as for this poem darling one, it is simply gorgeous and Oh how I wish I’d written this. But then sweet one I would have to have a little bit of your talent and everyone knows that I am just TPO, not the beautiful one. as always Mushy x x x x x Sweetest one, I miss you so much, how I wish that you were here. I might be able to get you to assist me with my wretched coursework.  Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
What's more beautiful than a big heart and "TRUE" friendship?....I know of nobody else with such beauty as you have.... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"Prettiness was never mine But I saw a sort of beauty When I looked at me Through your eyes" This is so well said and although some might deny it I do believe we sometimes need another's eyes to see what we cannot see or, at least, do not focus on in ourselves. We do perhaps take the good in us for granted until another person says, "wow" and then it hits home. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, my friends... *S* I appreciate your kind responses so very much! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Prettiness was never mine But I saw a sort of beauty When I looked at me Through your eyes" I am resisting the urge to lecture you--but tsk...yanno how you see some people and you know that they HAVE to know they are good looking? I always had you pegged for one of those. But the above stanza--isn't amazing how people can affect us? I have a "someone" who makes me feel pretty too. This is such a touching poem Ruth. (drop me a line, will ya?)  |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
I touch my face Where rivulets of tears Have left their mark When I read this poem I could feel a wound, a deep one... and I thought surely, she is writing of someone else's thoughts. I have read your poetry and your response to others here for many years now. I see your photo, though a picture is not necessary for me to see who you are. I've seen you, and you are of the truly beautiful ones, the rare, precious jewel among humans. You are priceless - never believe otherwise. You make the rest of us blessed. Caroline |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
serenity: Do good intentions count? LOL I'll try... soon. *S* icequeen: You fill my heart, dear lady... thank you! *S* I haven't been around much lately... but to everyone who responded so kindly... you have my enduring gratitude. It's so easy and tempting to write and just push it away... you remind me how much I miss when I do that. *S* Thank you! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Those rivers of tears form character lines on your face and they highlight the beauty you have - and yes my dear you have beauty even if you can't see it. a good commitee can decimate communication. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Suthern One, know that you truly are a 'Belle' in all our eyes! I am so thankful that Keth brought this poem back up to view! I would have missed this opportunity to express my adoration of both you and your muse. You are beautiful within ~ and without!  Linda |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
If only you could see what we see, you would see true beauty. Go buy yourself a new mirror. Then, you will see what we see. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSweetSuthernGal~ 'I saw a sort of beauty When I looked at me Through your eyes' ... and THAT my friend is your *gift* to the beholder~  You ARE friendship in beauty ... NO DOUBT~ Love ya' *Huglets*  ~*Me ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Beautiful poem, Ruth, except that you are pretty and beautiful and anyone can see that. - Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Keth, EA, SmartChick, Marge, Owl: Sweet ladies... I am so lucky to have you in my life... My poem and I both thank you for your kind eyes. *S* |
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