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Graffiti in Red
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Graffiti in Red |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Thoughts hammered to a blank screen became graffiti written in radiant colors of raging red Words exploded in all directions Empty promises trampled a fragile truce shattered a vestige of innocence until nothing remained but the simplicity of truth They were forever linked by life blood chains But thoughts hammered to a blank screen became graffiti written in radiant colors of raging red and even chains were not forever binding aziza |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I like this |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"nothing remained but the simplicity of truth" Yes, the simplicity of truth is something worth fighting for. Enjoyed the read! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"and even chains were not forever binding" yes powerful stuff here Alison |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
excellent write with beautiful turns of lovely phrases... loved this stanza "Words exploded in all directions Empty promises trampled a fragile truce shattered a vestige of innocence until nothing remained but the simplicity of truth" |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
With heart-felt thanks to all of you .. I thought of not posting this one .. wasn't sure how I felt about it. Still not sure even after stepping back from the emotion a bit. But, it means a lot to see each of your comments. Thank you. A |
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divine chaos Senior Member
since 2006-07-09
Posts 617dancing 'neath the moon |
zi .. i'm glad to finally have the time and brain power to actually bounce back in here and read you again, I love this one ... but ya know, I've decided that my favorite of all your creativities is the one that makes my daughter get out of bed at 2 in the morning to draw with you  she loved getting to talk to you last night. ~sheli~ By words the mind is winged |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Busted!!!! I loved that time with her - she is so damned smart and funny. She thanked me for the poem that I wrote to her when her dog died. Said her favorite line was "Sometimes life just kicks you in the ass" That just cracked me up. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
There is such power in you, and it spills out and transfers to the readers. I think this is excellent. Caroline |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Caroline Thank you very much for all the wonderful comments to my poetry. You have made me smile over and over in the last 24 hours. Alison |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"Empty promises trampled a fragile truce' This speaks volumes to me. And I adore your use of RED letters for it enhanced the line - "graffiti written in radiant colors of raging red." (wow...great line!) always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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