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0 posted 2009-03-29 03:11 PM



There are things, Mother, that you do not know
Like who I am and where I go
But every day your voice says the same thing:
"Girl, don't you go too fast.
"Live but make the moments last
There'll be time for dying when you're my age"


But, Mother, I feel so suffocated.
All my hopes and dreams have faded.
Should I run or stand still?
I'm afraid to fall....
So afraid to move at all
And I can't have what I need the most.


Oh, Mother, I've found my angel
The one who wouldn't change me
And I would never leave him
Not for anything you could dream to give me
Oh, Mother, he has my heart
Had it from the very start
And for once I am truly me
I'm truly happy


Oh, Mother, I'm so in love
He's the one I want
I've found the one I need
And when I wasn't looking
He became my everything


All my hopes and dreams have come to light
I'm dancing in the sun
I've fallen and it's so amazing
His smile stills my very soul
And dear Mother, at last I'm whole
I have what I need the most


Oh, Mother, I've found my angel
The one who will never change me
And I will never leave him
No, not for all the world
Dear Mother, he has my heart
Had it from the very start
And for once I am truly me
I'm truly happy


Oh, Mother, I'm so in love
He's the one I want
I've found the one I need
And now that I am looking
I see he's become my everything


Oh, Mother, I'm so in love
He's the one I want
I've found the one I need
And now that I am looking
I see he's become my everything


Oh, Dear Mother,
I'm not sorry that I love him.

© Copyright 2009 Cierra L. Robbeloth - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2009-03-29 08:38 PM


Surely sounds like a typical mother/daughter exchange, well done!
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2 posted 2009-03-30 02:21 AM




Dear Mysteria,

          Have a look at this poem by Robert Mezey, in anthologized form.  Mezey is excerpted here as a Jewish poet, but I think that's wrongheaded.  He is Jewish, yes, but the poem is much more than that.  The poem's also in a humor anthology, and it's much more than that, too.  I'd be interested in knowing your reaction.

http://books.google.com/books?id=EEi5pDcUE4MC&pg=PA271&lpg=PA271&dq=Robert+Mezey+%22My+mother+writes+from+Trenton/+a+comedian+to+the+bone%22&source=bl&ots=VHoPioOlMf&sig=I2Wwv20FR6 BaaiJwBjknfKxmAH0&hl=en&ei=nWPQSdPeDaj8tgPwmpCiAw&sa=X&oi=book_result&resnum=1&ct=result
Sincerely, Bob Kaven

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3 posted 2009-03-30 03:46 PM


"Oh, Mother, I've found my angel
The one who will never change me"

Sounds to me like he already has...

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4 posted 2009-03-30 09:05 PM


Or...a Mother/son exchange
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5 posted 2009-04-01 11:39 AM


mother/daughter exchange...

Serenity, I don't quite understand your meaning...

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6 posted 2009-04-01 02:49 PM


It wasn't a criticism. I've just been going through something personal, and this sounded like it could have been written by my daughter. I do thank you for helping me to see things from what might be her perspective. I think it's lovely, and when I read it I cried, because I could see the excitement of love in her eyes, and I wish I could be happy with her, too. (It's a long story...and half of that story is hers, so I should shaddup.)

Congratulations on this--some people think that when their readers take a write personally, the reader is at fault somehow.

I happen to think that when that happens, it's a significant indication of success on the writer's part.

Well done, lovie. (And I'll try to keep the dismay of my mothering instincts to myself.)

Or maybe I should write a Dear Daughter poem? There's so much I want to tell her, yanno.

I have been a pretty fierce mama bear, and I was so protective of my children that they never saw the inside of a daycare center, nor were they ever left with a babysitter that was not family. I had vowed never to leave them, so forgive me? It's a painful day of reckoning to find peace in the fact that if you are a successful mother--one day the same people you swore such allegiance to will one day leave you.

I didn't mean my tone to sound hostile.

It just hit home. So congratulations again.



*shaking my head*

I keep typing myself to tears these days.

Have a hug too.

I'm gonna go get another box of kleenex.

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7 posted 2009-04-02 03:24 PM


I may only be 16, but believe me Serenity...I understand. I'm the daughter of a teen wild-child, pregnant at 17, and given to her parents to raise that I might have a better life.

Consequently, their greatest fear is that I will become my mother. And I fear at times they fail to realize that that could never be. That's partly where this came from. Your daughter knows you love her. She'll never fully leave you but she does need to live her own life and she needs you to respect that. (To a certain extent, of course.)

Best of luck,
        Cierra

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8 posted 2009-04-02 04:54 PM


aw...thank you lovie, for your understanding and compassion. Sending you my best!
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