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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State 
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We forget soon as we shiver Or go skating on the river How we suffered last July, When the temperature was high. We're hard to please and don't remember So we beg in cold December For the heat that we rejected When it was so unexpected And we thought that we would die. God in patient understanding Of His children so demanding Shakes His head at foolish man And continues with His plan, As the seasons roll on by. By: Joyce 2009 |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Lovely, Joyce! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
So true Joyce! I enjoyed your poem. Love Betty Lou Betty Lou Hebert |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
But, but ... if we didn't have the weather -- how would we ever open our conversations??? I like this one, Joyce. We are so hard to please, aren't we. xoxoo Alison |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
I enjoyed this read. Thanks, Melton |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
So true, so true, and you put it down wonderfully on paper. Z. |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Joyce, This is a lovely poem pointing out our seasonal dismay, I'm thankful we have a loving, patient Father who understands. Dennis :^) |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Isn't that the truth! I like where I live. It's gorgeous and green here and not given to extreme temperatures, usually, but it rains, rains, rains...from October until June. Not many people use umbrellas here, though. They just face into it, and wish for blue sky to put in an appearance. Oddly enough, we get a couple weeks of spring-like weather in February, and and I so hope the ground hog does not see his shadow!  ) |
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Beasley Senior Member
since 2003-11-28
Posts 682Cheboygan,MI USA |
You really word painted human nature. Great poem! Barb |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Thank you all of my classy poet friends for reading and commenting on my poetry. Love, Joyce |
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Trapped - Nothing Member
since 2010-04-25
Posts 52 |
So we beg in cold December For the heat that we rejected When it was so unexpected And we thought that we would die. These lines are flowing and organized. I like when people use metaphors. In this case, your form and structure is somewhat solid, but the use of metaphors/simile is lacking. When people use metaphors/similes especially when the form and structure is decent, the meaning and emotion is multipied x100. So we yearn like howling dogs in cold December For the tumultous heat that we rejected The heat, so uninvited and unexpected Our days we would send because we thought we would die I hope this constructive |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Dear Trapped. Why don't you show some of your own poetry rather than rewriting ours? Joyce |
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