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The Halo Slipped Just A Bit
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The Halo Slipped Just A Bit |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon 
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I thought you were a man With an angelic smile. I followed after your halo Year after year, mile after mile. I loved your loving heart And the touch of gentle hand. I followed after your halo Over gravel, meadows, sea, and land. Your laugh made me so happy A mirthful twinkle in your eye. I followed after your halo Not knowing that you would lie. The words came to you so easy Everything just seemed to fit. I followed after your halo And saw it had slipped just a bit. By: Shawna R. Holder © August 2005 |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Sad but very nicely done. Joyce |
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dwgpoet Member
since 2007-03-05
Posts 122FL, USA |
Yes, nicely done Shawna. Your repetition ended with a TiTlec surmise. reminds me of, "Sam's Fish-Tale- (Triolet)" copyright dwgpoet 2007 |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
I really enjoyed reading this poem! It was really good! |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Thank you Joyce, dwgpoet, and Brittany J for reading and for your sweet comments. Have a wonderful day all. |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
perfection or the lack thereof is in the eyes of the beholder. however, if memory serves me correctly,the last time a man was perfect, he was nailed to a cross! |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Well, I've always there was only one perfect man on this earth...and they crucufied Him. Didn't really expect perfection but some things just blind side ya. I got over it. Wasn't as devastating as it could have been. |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
yep, been blind-sided a couple times myself...think i know what your saying...its the suddenness, the suprise,or the unexpected...kinda like a fall...the fall is not so bad but the suprise jolt at end kinda smarts a bit. |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
LOL exactly!!! |
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jossal Junior Member
since 2007-09-15
Posts 23 |
Wonderful poem, I wish mine could reach that standard. Alas, my poems are just not good enough. The last time sumone was perfect,he was sacrificed to save our sins. Darkness is only the lack of light... |
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