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Cold Minutes

Vincent
Member

since 2007-02-03

Posts 52

0 posted 2007-03-24 12:17 PM

The wood has grayed
many years of weather,
fighting Winter, July boils,
and the rain"
Comfort on the old back-steps
twisted some, but sturdy.

Dark clouds move across
lighter shades,
or is it the world moving around
charcoal splashes.
Rain..doesn`t it seem searing at times.

I fought the day to bring me here,
the cold minutes spent alone...
no one to watch the rain"...Vincent

Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

1 posted 2007-03-24 06:56 PM

Descriptive and wistful. Joyce

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2007-03-26 12:53 PM

"or is it the world moving around
charcoal splashes."

hmmm...I like the image this brings. Hey, I love to watch the rains too.*smile*

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2007-04-01 10:07 AM

Thanks for sharing your minutes, Vincent! Well done!

JohnnyWood
New Member

since 2007-03-26

Posts 8

4 posted 2007-04-01 04:47 PM

"Rain..doesn`t it seem searing at times"

That it does. Beautifully in tune to the most subtle moment; I love your style.

midnightblues
Senior Member

since 2000-07-01

Posts 1597
Singapore

5 posted 2007-04-02 07:37 AM

Short, sweet, poignant.. My favourite combination

Love,
MiCheLLe

If there cannot be equal in affection, then let the one with more be me - midnightblues

Trillium

Member Patricius

since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

6 posted 2007-04-02 10:37 PM

Vincent: You certainly set the scene and the atmosphere well with this one. Very enjoyable to read.

Trillium

Betty Lou Hebert

Debo
Member

since 2006-04-18

Posts 321
Texas U.S.A.

7 posted 2007-05-04 09:38 AM

I wouldn't mind sitting on those twisted back steps for a little while.
Wonderful description.

Debo

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