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pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

0 posted 2007-07-05 11:13 AM

Can you see her crying?
Do you see her heart breaking into tiny little pieces?
She watches your lips as they’re screaming
Her fragile heart is bleeding
But you don’t care that you’re the causer of her pain

One day maybe she’ll figure out
That she doesn’t have to stick around
She’ll show you that she’s strong
That she can live without you
And one day you’ll realize you were wrong

They say that Hell’s seventh circle is saved for betrayers
But she knows it’s there waiting for the abusers
Those who hurt the innocent
The fellers of Earth’s fallen angels
She knows one day she’ll have her revenge

But until then she’s getting stronger
Trying so hard to build a wall against you
But so that someone else
Could still break through
So that someone else can help her
Save herself
From you

[This message has been edited by pen&paper (07-06-2007 10:34 AM).]

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-07-05 05:41 PM

Save herself
From you~

great ending summed it up well. I really liked the meaning behind this
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Jezzika
Member

since 2005-01-05

Posts 154
work

2 posted 2007-07-06 12:05 PM

This was so great!!
I loved the ending...i thought it was AWESOME!!!!

One trillion dollars could buy a heart a soul ~ Anti-Flag

pencil&paper
Member

since 2006-09-09

Posts 76
asleep somewhere in my head

3 posted 2007-07-15 07:52 PM

i liked it it reminds me of some stuff

i agree with hunnie the ending is really good

"Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

4 posted 2007-07-15 09:23 PM

Pen! I loved it

"Trying so hard to build a wall against you
But so that someone else
Could still break through
So that someone else can help her
Save herself
From you"

These are my favorite lines!! It was beautiful!

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

5 posted 2007-07-16 06:58 PM

i don't mean to sound high and mighty but just keep somewhere in the deepest recesses of yor mind that revenge is never as satisfactory as you think it will be. but i loved the poem.

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

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