Teen Poetry #8 |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
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Can you see her crying? Do you see her heart breaking into tiny little pieces? She watches your lips as they’re screaming Her fragile heart is bleeding But you don’t care that you’re the causer of her pain One day maybe she’ll figure out That she doesn’t have to stick around She’ll show you that she’s strong That she can live without you And one day you’ll realize you were wrong They say that Hell’s seventh circle is saved for betrayers But she knows it’s there waiting for the abusers Those who hurt the innocent The fellers of Earth’s fallen angels She knows one day she’ll have her revenge But until then she’s getting stronger Trying so hard to build a wall against you But so that someone else Could still break through So that someone else can help her Save herself From you [This message has been edited by pen&paper (07-06-2007 10:34 AM).] |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Save herself From you~ great ending summed it up well. I really liked the meaning behind this hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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Jezzika Member
since 2005-01-05
Posts 154work |
This was so great!! I loved the ending...i thought it was AWESOME!!!! ![]() One trillion dollars could buy a heart a soul ~ Anti-Flag |
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pencil&paper Member
since 2006-09-09
Posts 76asleep somewhere in my head |
i liked it it reminds me of some stuff i agree with hunnie the ending is really good "Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
Pen! I loved it ![]() "Trying so hard to build a wall against you But so that someone else Could still break through So that someone else can help her Save herself From you" These are my favorite lines!! It was beautiful! So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
i don't mean to sound high and mighty but just keep somewhere in the deepest recesses of yor mind that revenge is never as satisfactory as you think it will be. but i loved the poem. -Red "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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