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BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

0 posted 2007-06-20 02:56 PM

Don't look at me like that,
Like you know just how i feel.
Have you ever been through this,
Because to me it's more than real.

Don't judge by what you see,
For i hide inside my heart.
I'll tell you once and only once,
But i can't promise i'm not falling apart.

Don't ask me what i'm thinking,
You might not want to know.
So turn and leave me here,
It's best if you just go.

Don't hide from me your secrets,
Sooner or later i'll see the light.
I just want you to know one thing,
I'm not falling apart tonight.

Don't tell me that you care,
When i know that it's a lie.
You shouldn't try to fool a friend,
Who knows how to make you cry.

Don't think for one minute,
I can't go on when you depart.
I'll give you my word, and promise you now
That i'm not falling apart.

There is only so much blood i can bleed for you, and continue to live.

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

1 posted 2007-06-20 04:09 PM

Brillian! I loved the ryme and everything, and it all fit and there are some poems where it just clicks and all works. ONE OF MY FAVORITE PIECES BY YOU>

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

2 posted 2007-06-20 11:15 PM

Thanks

It only took me about 20 minutes to write, it just kinda flowed out, but most of my other poems are aweful

Thanks again.

There is only so much blood i can bleed for you, and continue to live.

lovergurl
Member

since 2007-05-08

Posts 59
va

3 posted 2007-07-27 02:09 PM

this poem was absolutely amazing.
i loved it.
=]
great job!

Becca.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2007-07-27 08:15 PM

yes one of my fav. too, it flowed really well... and No your other poems are not awful

hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

5 posted 2007-07-28 02:19 AM

Hey, this is awesome! Very good flow, nice wording, I'm impressed! Good job!

Life's not about the amount of breaths you take. It's about knowing the right time to inhale, the right time to hold your breath, and the right time t

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